Departing Sun

Honed from old habits, you leave us once again

Leaving again, the way of lovers departing...

Oh, departing sun, you linger in the dusk

In dusky mauve, so reluctant to say goodbye

Goodbye you speak in many tongues 

Forked tongues of light, you spread your words in gold

And with a golden hand, and fingers spread

You spread your promise, vast against the sky

Where sky, that mingles  with the crimson earth

Unite the earth and thee to blend

You blend, and lend your colors rich....

Rich in soft pastels, ...until,....until you come again

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Inspired by the Contest: "Wreath on the Flavor of Dusk"
Sponsored by Nette Onclaud
By Carrie Richards  8/12/12
Copyright © | Year Posted 2012


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Date: 8/21/2012 11:43:00 AM
Many congratulations on another win Carrie xx
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Date: 8/21/2012 6:53:00 AM
Congratulations on your well deserved placement in Nette's "Wreath" contest Carrie. Love, Carol
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Date: 8/20/2012 2:28:00 AM
Wonderful and Beautiful piece,Carrie...Very interesting and great write...Congratulations on your super win....Kudos to you...
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Date: 8/19/2012 8:29:00 PM
I love the ending!! Congrats to you on your victory!!!
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Date: 8/19/2012 1:45:00 AM
Carrie belated congrats on your win...David
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Date: 8/18/2012 8:35:00 PM
Beautiful work!
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Date: 8/18/2012 2:33:00 PM
It feels like a mantra!! Congrad's on your win Light & Love
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Date: 8/18/2012 12:27:00 PM
I wrote one for this contest that I was quite pleased with until I re-checked the rules and realized it was too long AND on the wrong subject! (HATE it when that happens)...and you make it look so effortless! Not surprised this was a winner...Have a good day, my friend! - Tim
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Date: 8/18/2012 11:22:00 AM
Of course, I predicted THIS top win! Congrats, sweetie.
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Date: 8/18/2012 11:12:00 AM
A beautiful verse here Carrie...very good personification of Sun....Congrats on your top win.
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Date: 8/18/2012 8:43:00 AM
Great one that reminds me of the old verse that I love to read...Congrats..Sara
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Date: 8/18/2012 7:22:00 AM
Congratulations on your winning poem. Very pretty.
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Date: 8/18/2012 7:17:00 AM
very different and refreshing wreath, carrie!.. you didn't have to write long lines to express your thoughts.. lovely!..cheers to you on your top win in my contest!..:) huggs!
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Date: 8/14/2012 7:01:00 PM
breathtakingly beautiful, Carrie. A sure top winner!
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Date: 8/14/2012 10:15:00 AM
what an awesome write, Carrie - I can't think of anything for this contest yet, but yours has to be a winner
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Date: 8/13/2012 6:20:00 PM
Reads like a winner..Very creative and descriptive work..I am glad that I chose this one to read today..Thanks for stopping by my blog..The creek rose and I did not get my contest posted..Aiming for early tomorrow morning..Sara
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Date: 8/12/2012 4:36:00 PM
Carrie great entreee fo rthe contest..I like...David
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