Deficiencies

The image of a young child filled her mind,
she was no more than four feet tall,
sweet and very kind,
always loved the mall,
her voice crackling,
her mind tackling
issues she thought she didn’t have to deal with,
it was a crying shame,
she knew her clothes were getting too big,
as they draped a thin frame,
sometimes she’d look like a twig,
the image of her were of skeleton and bone,
malnourished, deficiencies, defects,
is why she always felt alone,
it made her a pale trophy for death’s room,
as it craved her end, and craved her doom,
her sickness became intense,
there was no pretense,
that she could sense,
her glossy eyes revealed the signs,
she was just too thin,
bones sticking out all over her skin,
her mother walking on the beach, so sad,
as she walked on the white sand, so mad,
chiseled and polished by the rushing tide,
crying, uncontrollably,
because that day her daughter died.
Copyright © | Year Posted 2009


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Date: 3/9/2009 10:28:00 AM
Okay I was going to ask when you started talking like Yoda but I just found I've missed another write. When I found how weird you were I started looking for your postings so I cant understand how Ive been missing them.Now that you don't post anymore I guess I can just look through old ones. Of all your creepy ones these are so much more unnerving. Its hard to be mean to you when you write about these subjects so I'll um say- okay I really tried, I promise
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Date: 2/23/2009 4:56:00 PM
Please tell me you are published. You write of life...what you see, not just what you personnaly feel, or are you an exterme empath? meow time to go. thank you again Frank.
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Date: 2/21/2009 3:44:00 AM
very heart breaking... wonderfully penned the lines... so sad!! had tears reading it... ~ Arany
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Date: 2/20/2009 9:21:00 AM
Touching, sad write. God Bless. Vince
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Date: 2/19/2009 6:01:00 AM
This is very sad Frank. I love the how you opened the piece and then brought us back to the mom in the end..nice visual..you are a story teller my friend..Keep on doing ya ting.
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