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Dusk, the end of day, the soften bed of moonlight, brings wild thoughts within its sultry shadows musing. Belle Lune, fair damsel, bringing love and fright, release my tongue-tied self, please allow my crooning. Troubadours have strung the onyx sky with comet tails glittering white, and bowed each string to unite the pensive poet's heart and that of his fair coquette; see them sway, a dance displayed amour in the moonlight. Shadows deepen, have they left, thought hard, grown contrite or has the moon, amused, drawn shadows 'round as gowns? Will he rise at dawn, curtains drawn, write of the night? The maid, the moon, the well so deep, the heat profound calls to him in memory, now cooled by harsh light. For now, there is, but the empty page of daylight.

Copyright © | Year Posted 2013




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Date: 6/9/2017 9:52:00 AM
We have entered the short nights of winter, oh how I wish we that those nice lingering eves back. Great words, my favs were those about the shadows.
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Date: 3/10/2014 6:57:00 PM
inspiration enough. congradulations Deb.
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Date: 3/10/2014 6:38:00 PM
Onyx sky, I like that ..a beautiful poem you have written..congrats on your win Debbie
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Date: 3/10/2014 4:54:00 PM
I liked this one a lot, too. Seems so...honest. About all I can really. Nice work!
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Date: 3/10/2014 5:17:00 AM
Very inspirational write. Congrats on the fine win, debbie
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Date: 3/20/2013 4:54:00 PM
Congrats Debbie .Donna
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Date: 3/19/2013 4:24:00 PM
I especially like the opening lines of this winning entry..Congrats..Sara
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Date: 3/18/2013 5:17:00 PM
Congratulations Debbie on your beautiful sonnet and win. Love, Joyce
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Date: 3/18/2013 5:01:00 PM
Debbie, congratulations with your musing moon poem :-) hope your having a sweet day... always~ LINDA
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Date: 3/18/2013 9:56:00 AM
Just great, Debbie...Congrats!
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Date: 3/18/2013 9:44:00 AM
Debbie, You're always in the mix. Congratulations on your top placing in Russell's contest. RAY
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Date: 3/18/2013 9:08:00 AM
Debbie this is a wonderful sonnet. Congratulation on your win. Warm Smiles, Connie
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Date: 3/6/2013 1:44:00 PM
Oh, wow - This is so packed with romantic imagery. I love that you brought the reader back to reality with those last two lines. Much like waking up from a dream. (And thank you so much for my placement in your contest!)
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Date: 3/6/2013 8:19:00 AM
PS......many thanks for my encouragement and help in your contest!!! Very grateful for all your input!
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Date: 3/6/2013 8:18:00 AM
Another classic.......one for the books! (and I want a book!)
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Date: 3/4/2013 11:55:00 AM
Hey, you, love the mode mixed with the classically romantic feel of this one. Also, I "think" that Soup (??not sure??) is trying to have some kind of friend space, so you can share work with only a few, this would be perfect for special work, publishable. It would also provide a private space for feedback, proofreading, discussion and reflection. I have no idea what it is about, but I remember reading about it, somewhere. Uh? Sent you a soupmail, my mind has gone wild... ABC, indeedy! xox Dee
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Date: 3/3/2013 12:42:00 PM
A very cool write oh cool one xx
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Date: 3/3/2013 9:02:00 AM
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Date: 3/3/2013 8:55:00 AM
Debbie; This is an awesome write. I just loved it. Thanks for sharing. Lucilla
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Date: 3/2/2013 9:07:00 AM
great job by you Debi!It has a classical touch !!
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Date: 3/1/2013 2:27:00 AM
This is really an amazing write my dear friend!The beautiful image of the moon as muse is well painted by your creative words here. Thank you so much for sharing and also for stopping by on my poems. Have a great day. love/hugs, Leonora
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Date: 2/28/2013 7:06:00 AM
OMG! This is really a stunning masterpiece! I always loved how you uttered your unique words and crafted them into this beautiful muse, two thumbs up Debbie :D - hug, Yanny
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Date: 2/28/2013 4:48:00 AM
I could easily envision your awesome poem. Nicely done Debbie. Best wishes in the contest. Warm Smiles, Connie
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Date: 2/27/2013 8:55:00 PM
A beautiful Sonnet you've written here, Debbie! The multiple and perfect imagery makes it richer, still! A Winner for sure! Love, annalise
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Date: 2/27/2013 4:25:00 PM
ooooh that last line is awesome imagery for me!!! The whole poem really speaks to the theme of the moon as a muse. GREAT sonneteering, Debs!!
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