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Dawn of a New Year

When she was the first to step across the threshold I knew things were off to a good start. Outside, dark and lowering clouds pressed in, But inside, her beaming face made me warm all over. I wondered if we should still go for a walk, But she insisted, hinting that I was afraid of the stormy skies. In no time, I shrugged on my leather jacket and we set off. The cold winds whipped at our clothing all the way to the park, A little raindrop spattering here and there. It soon intensified to a downpour. The freezing drops soaked right through her coat And her dark braids had raindrops sliding down them, So we ran to a pine tree, and I placed my coat on her shoulders. My shirt was instantly drenched, Chilling me where it touched my skin. But I did not care. Because I was huddling under a tree with my favourite girl And all it took was a look at her beaming face to make my heart warm.

Copyright © | Year Posted 2013




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Date: 7/4/2013 12:13:00 AM
"tremendously awesome........... congrats!!! SKAT"
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Date: 7/1/2013 8:42:00 PM
wow, I think this is one of the few I have seen from a man's point of view and you did it splendidly. Congrats on whatever placement you got for your win. It was deserved.
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Date: 6/28/2013 3:51:00 PM
So romantic. Congrats on your fine win. Warm Smiles, Connie
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Date: 6/28/2013 9:05:00 AM
Congrats on your win. Well done
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Date: 6/26/2013 2:48:00 PM
Watch out under trees in storms!! ;)Congrad's on your win. Light & Love
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Date: 6/19/2013 7:48:00 AM
Great imagery and romantic lines tells the story of a genuinely sweet experience :)
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Date: 6/4/2013 3:48:00 PM
This is awesome Isaiah! I'm assuming it's for the contest? This will do very well, with its intense imagery and sweet feeling :)
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Date: 6/3/2013 3:52:00 PM
sugary and enthralling... nice phrasing with lines that lead to perfect cadence..:) huggs!
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Date: 6/3/2013 11:42:00 AM
Awwwweee that is such a sweet poem!
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Date: 6/1/2013 1:00:00 AM
This poem somehow remind me of amovie i ve seen years ago called Dirty dancing..I can pixture the image of the leading actor with his leather jacket holding this young woman s hand in his and going for the car.Tnks for the memory :).Now to the poem-I can picture this romantic scene you painted with words-you and her in the rain under a tree..but nothing except your warmth and huddles matter.A very romantic writer you are .
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