Darkness of One Spring Dawn

Your suitcase was home where you left it
We had left in a hurry

A clock on the sterile wall was ticking away dwindling moments
And was the only sound to break the morning silence

Outside a pale May sun, was laboring to start the day
And was the only thing that held our years together

I had stayed by your bedside if they allowed me to,
If they didn't, I walked and paced and waited until the dawn
I knew every crack on the hospital sidewalk
Bombarded by memories I could not remember to forget

Losing your battle, there was hardly a chance to say goodbye….
They handed me your slippers, and night things in a bag
I tucked them under my arm....for the trip home...

Later if people asked …..those same old questions they always ask
I wanted to say simply…."Why?  Does it matter?…..All that mattered...
                               was gone…"



________________________________________

Copyright © | Year Posted 2011



Post Comments

Poetrysoup is an environment of encouragement and growth so only provide specific positive comments that indicate what you appreciate about the poem. Negative comments will result your account being banned.

Please Login to post a comment

Date: 6/12/2011 1:54:00 PM
Touching write and a more unique personal take than most should have been higher ;) [a fan] Light & Love
Login to Reply
Date: 5/4/2011 2:13:00 PM
Congrats Carrie on another great write and win!!! love Michael
Login to Reply
Date: 5/3/2011 12:28:00 PM
Congrats Carrie, nice work :o)
Login to Reply
Date: 5/3/2011 8:57:00 AM
Congrats on your HM, Carrie. Excellent piece. Nice going. xxxRalph
Login to Reply
Date: 5/3/2011 4:42:00 AM
Congrats Carrie on your HM in Paula's contest with this fantastic write ... let us enjoy our HM's together for excellence .. great honor..luv..
Login to Reply
Date: 5/3/2011 4:03:00 AM
Congratulations on your wonderful win Carrie in Paula's "When" contest. Love, Carol
Login to Reply
Date: 5/2/2011 11:27:00 PM
oh shucks, Carrie-- this moved me so much-- I read it twice in a row, and both times I got the chills, even stronger the second time around! Wow! I just felt this poem, brought me back to my own experience with this, this is just amazing! & thank you for dropping by my poems-yes me thinks our mouse can run off and we can have a party, heehee-- btw sending you soupmail after...
Login to Reply
Date: 5/2/2011 9:54:00 PM
A splendid title for a reflection of a very sad time, Carrie. marvelous writing as always. Congratulations to you!
Login to Reply
Date: 5/2/2011 8:26:00 PM
. Many warm congrats for this win Carrie.
Login to Reply
Date: 4/29/2011 1:16:00 PM
I enjoyed reading your poetry today Carrie. The best to you in the contest. Wishing you a wonderful weekend filled with inspiration. I hope the sun shines down upon you and brings joy into your heart. Love, Carol
Login to Reply
Get a Premium Membership
Get more exposure for your poetry and more features with a Premium Membership.
Book: Radiant Verses: A Journey Through Inspiring Poetry

Member Area

My Admin
Profile and Settings
Edit My Poems
Edit My Quotes
Edit My Short Stories
Edit My Articles
My Comments Inboxes
My Comments Outboxes
Soup Mail
Poetry Contests
Contest Results/Status
Followers
Poems of Poets I Follow
Friend Builder

Soup Social

Poetry Forum
New/Upcoming Features
The Wall
Soup Facebook Page
Who is Online
Link to Us

Member Poems

Poems - Top 100 New
Poems - Top 100 All-Time
Poems - Best
Poems - by Topic
Poems - New (All)
Poems - New (PM)
Poems - New by Poet
Poems - Read
Poems - Unread

Member Poets

Poets - Best New
Poets - New
Poets - Top 100 Most Poems
Poets - Top 100 Most Poems Recent
Poets - Top 100 Community
Poets - Top 100 Contest

Famous Poems

Famous Poems - African American
Famous Poems - Best
Famous Poems - Classical
Famous Poems - English
Famous Poems - Haiku
Famous Poems - Love
Famous Poems - Short
Famous Poems - Top 100

Famous Poets

Famous Poets - Living
Famous Poets - Most Popular
Famous Poets - Top 100
Famous Poets - Best
Famous Poets - Women
Famous Poets - African American
Famous Poets - Beat
Famous Poets - Cinquain
Famous Poets - Classical
Famous Poets - English
Famous Poets - Haiku
Famous Poets - Hindi
Famous Poets - Jewish
Famous Poets - Love
Famous Poets - Metaphysical
Famous Poets - Modern
Famous Poets - Punjabi
Famous Poets - Romantic
Famous Poets - Spanish
Famous Poets - Suicidal
Famous Poets - Urdu
Famous Poets - War

Poetry Resources

Anagrams
Bible
Book Store
Character Counter
Cliché Finder
Poetry Clichés
Common Words
Copyright Information
Grammar
Grammar Checker
Homonym
Homophones
How to Write a Poem
Lyrics
Love Poem Generator
New Poetic Forms
Plagiarism Checker
Poetry Art
Publishing
Random Word Generator
Spell Checker
Store
What is Good Poetry?
Word Counter