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a breeze chills as the dry leave dance - my heart SING?

rewritten on 12-12-2013 taking help from my friend Poet.Debbie Guzzi.

Breeze chill, dry leaves dance - my heart too...

 written on 11-12-2013 for the contest "monoku form or free verse" by Broken wings

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  1. Date: 1/28/2014 2:44:00 AM
    A beautiful imagery..evoking emotion and teases the senses!!!Charma

  1. Date: 1/1/2014 9:11:00 AM
    They are both nice Undertaker; but I like what I can read into the original ;)

  1. Date: 12/15/2013 4:56:00 PM
    I like the monoku...The wet leaves have been dancing here..Thanks for stopping by..Sara

  1. Date: 12/14/2013 1:14:00 AM
    I LOVE the imagery in this . GOod luck in the contest, my friend.

  1. Date: 12/13/2013 11:25:00 PM
    My heart dances, too, when I am outside experiencing nature's beauty! Great work, Jenish! I wish you the best of luck in the contest!...Thank you very much for my placement in your contest. I really appreciate the recognition.

  1. Date: 12/13/2013 8:14:00 AM
    I like both versions very much. And I thank you for my placement in your contest.

  1. Date: 12/11/2013 10:36:00 AM
    - Like it, well done Jenish ! - Luck in contest! - oxox // Anne-Lise :)

  1. Date: 12/11/2013 4:28:00 AM
    Nice image you have created so well,Jenish