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Crippling Darkness

A summer night in an autumn's room My fingers shaking, my heart's constant boom My eyes are closed but i'm not asleep The fan on high is the only faint squeak Repetition makes a fool out of me (Change the game to live happily) Prayer offered fervently upon shaking knees The shadows descend from outside trees Hypocrisy, shame: the names of my game My misery, my reality needs no such fame Repitition makes a fool out of me (I'm changing the game, so I can see)

Copyright © | Year Posted 2013




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Date: 3/3/2014 6:48:00 PM
Hi Juli, I came to this poem because it's couplet, being generally a couplet writer myself thus I'm attracted to them. I see this as opening the heart and eyes to a brighter future, very well written. I'd like to thank you for the placement in your last contest, much appreciated. Take care, Richard
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Date: 10/12/2013 12:45:00 PM
A heart felt piece. Well done.
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Date: 10/12/2013 1:49:00 AM
Juli-Michelle you express the feeling of inner fear and apprehension so well in these lines, very well written...David
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Date: 10/10/2013 1:07:00 PM
filled with great lines. The first one is excellent...TAH
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Date: 10/9/2013 3:18:00 PM
A poignant write, kudos.. Ken
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Date: 10/8/2013 8:41:00 PM
This is very deep, Julie........ enjoyed :) LOVE ~SKAT~
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Date: 10/8/2013 8:03:00 AM
deep reflection that makes me wonder at your fine sensibilities, juli.. i had internet problems and only found out i placed in your contest... i am so honored, thank you humbly!..:) huggs
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Date: 10/7/2013 9:41:00 PM
What an expression on the inner thoughts, Juli
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Book: Shattered Sighs