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City Boy Blues

musty clothes strewn about a dusty room full of hot black bodies in dirty underwear exhausted from a day of surviving the sound of late night traffic filters in through the rusty screens in the broken windows periodically interrupted by the rebel yell of lost teens and homeless men my descriptions are painfully inadequate even though i have been there painfully inadequate even though i have lived there gnarled fingers rolling top papers into poor mans cigarettes the porch creaks when you walk across it's peeling planks notifying occupants of intruders poor mans alarm i want to move but it follows me from one hole to another with it's smells of degradation and it's hopes of redemption

Copyright © | Year Posted 2009




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Date: 4/29/2009 11:58:00 AM
Amazing again. You are a wonderful poet, so very far from inadequate! You paint such vivid pictures that they always stay with me long after I have finished reading. Kat x
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Date: 4/23/2009 8:49:00 PM
Brian, your descriptions are anything but "painfully inadequate." Your images are consistently compelling in all of your poems. This is yet another example.
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Date: 4/23/2009 8:24:00 PM
Such despair in a busy raw city Brian, this is a compelling and moving write. You are a gifted poet. Thanks for sharing your talented pen my friend.
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Date: 4/23/2009 10:34:00 AM
As Christopher said...you have painted the scene so well...can breathe in the city, hear the sound, smell the smells. Well done. Carrie
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Date: 4/23/2009 10:31:00 AM
This sounds like a lot of major cities..from the NYC to Detroit..I can see and smell this city..I can see the poor man's cigarette being lit..wonderful painting of a picture my brother...
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