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Burning Embers

Shredded completely, the words of a liar Your old love poems ignite when tossed in the fire The blaze attacks swiftly, first singing the edges Then blackening into ashes, all your false pledges Your cheating on me actually did me a favor I now have a freedom and a life I can savor No more heeding to you and your silly demands No dinner at 6, no house spic and span I can sit where I want, I can laugh out loud Without you to scold me, there’s no little black cloud Hanging over my head, telling me what to do No “hurry up stupid,” or “get me my tools” For I have an inner strength that you didn’t know A flowerbed of dreams that I plan to sow - I’m done with your critical analysis I’m a flaming red poppy, reaching for the sun’s kiss... 2/5/13 Black Eyed Susan For Gail's "Burning Embers" contest

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Date: 11/19/2014 8:18:00 PM
Brilliant! I always come back to read your work, Susan. You are such a talented writer. I hope you'll be posting again soon. Hugs, Rhonda
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Date: 11/12/2013 2:43:00 AM
weldone Susan...lemme read it again before i say more
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Date: 4/21/2013 6:54:00 PM
Brilliant metaphor and captivating allo the way through
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Date: 4/21/2013 1:02:00 AM
Check your soup mail. I have other comments than the one below. :-)
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Date: 4/20/2013 8:40:00 PM
There's a beautiful feeling of Freedom and growth that is palpable in this write. really enjoyed this Susan.
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Date: 4/6/2013 7:36:00 AM
Wow, I loved how you framed his bleak words of liar ignite in fire.. Actually I loved every line! Belated congrats :)
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Date: 3/27/2013 12:59:00 AM
That was most excellent. I've read other pomes that were contest entries of yours, but this one was great. You certainly have an insight to passion. All I can say is, "Well done". Rockman
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Date: 3/7/2013 2:01:00 AM
Congrats on your win. Nicely done. Connie
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Date: 3/6/2013 9:54:00 PM
SUSAN, ;-) congratulations with your sweet and awesome win, in my any poem goes contest. Good Night~ LINDA
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Date: 2/23/2013 12:03:00 PM
Thanks, Susan - loved the contest. Yes, I agree with everything Andrea said below - such a powerful ending
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Date: 2/22/2013 5:51:00 PM
REading it for a third time. My mind is not young any more for me to ever forget this powerful poem. It was really good, Susan. I especially loved the way you ended it with the red poppy reaching for the sun's kiss. For me, endings are SO important in a poem ,and I know you feel that way too.
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Date: 2/19/2013 10:18:00 PM
A flaming red poppy burning up the dross in her life. Excellent!
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Date: 2/14/2013 1:29:00 PM
love this positive write, Susan
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Date: 2/13/2013 3:40:00 PM
Well said! The last line is a "killer" for sure! Best wishes for the contest!Always, Annalise
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Date: 2/8/2013 10:43:00 PM
!!!
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Date: 2/8/2013 12:50:00 PM
Burn baby burn! I agree with Andrea...that flaming red poppy line is killer.
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Date: 2/7/2013 6:44:00 PM
rereading this one. JOe should be walking in at any moment. I sure love that red poppy image at the end!
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Date: 2/7/2013 7:02:00 AM
Great work that is expressive and emotive..I hope written from hearing others' stories and not your life's experience..Reads like winning material for the contest..Good luck ..Sara
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Date: 2/7/2013 4:41:00 AM
The last line floored me, Susan...I feel the rage throughout this poem...you gotta winner, I think...And in honor of your fottle comment...'I bought a new sailboat, so when the weather warms up a bit you wanna go: Cruisin', Susan?'
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Date: 2/6/2013 3:18:00 PM
Hey Susan, wow... maybe I should enter my own poem in her contest... and change all my work... good entry... awesome ending... PD
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Date: 2/6/2013 3:07:00 PM
wow, Susan, you did a great job with this topic! It's awesome to see you with a poem posted today. thanks so much also for reading some of mine today. I miss you not being here so often. Luv, Andrea
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Date: 2/6/2013 2:51:00 PM
hi Susan, it's such a nice poem, rhyming well, and spot on with its message and hope it's not about your experience!! :) Jag
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Date: 2/6/2013 2:43:00 PM
this is a wonderful poem, so beautifully rhymed and so life-affirming! i love the ending and am rooting for your "flaming red poppy" - you go, girl!
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Date: 2/6/2013 9:35:00 AM
Oh Susan, i cant believe how fate gets it so wrong, this love cycle.. yet what wonderful poetry your emotions create, when hurt,,, love this....
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Date: 2/6/2013 7:35:00 AM
This is a wonderful story of the strength of a woman who's been through a lot..I really liked it..best wishes for the contest...luv,Deb
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