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breathing in chaos

the crickets break the silence
of the still, dark night

the leaves stir in hushed waves
as the wind whispers past

the moon hides…
shy behind her veiled curtain,

she lets tears flow instead

no crickets chirp
the leaves weep 
as the winds wail

and I—

I breathe in the chaos,
feel the cold 
dampen the world 
around me

but my spirit 
for some reason
is refreshed

I guess
nature also needs to vent


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  1. Date: 5/26/2011 2:15:00 PM
    Hi Nikko- Of course, nature does have to vent. You are absoltuely right..I never really thot about personifying nature in such a way as you have in this poem...I love it! Especially your free verse's broken up in a way that allows the reader natural pauses after each thought... Lovely, Nikko. When does your book come out? :) Gwendolen

  1. Date: 5/26/2011 7:30:00 AM
    I love the joy and turmoil of fresh air~luv*SKAT

  1. Date: 5/21/2011 1:18:00 PM
    Hey, Nikko, thanks for your comment. I just lost 18 pounds but my body doesn't seem to want to go any further. Still want to lost at least 7 more pounds. Love from the elephant lady (And, drat, now you've got me missing my mom's apple pie. When will my care package arrive? LOL)

  1. Date: 5/15/2011 5:23:00 AM
    Just wanted to ssay I'm glad you're enjoying new activities, Nikko. I need a break too. I'll try and be as productive as you. You're an inspiration. Love, Carolyn

  1. Date: 5/13/2011 8:38:00 PM
    thankxx for your sweet comments sweet Nikko friend .. hope u will enjoy a very happy weekend luv.. we are so relaxing ... much needed .. much desired... soon our home.. in a year or two luv..

  1. Date: 5/13/2011 7:53:00 AM
    i have an awesome way of thinking that pushing a baby in to this wolrd is chotic for the baby,,,lol once it takes its first breath its breathing in gosh i have a wild imagination,, accck! <-- lol. (h) But you are right,, the essence that nature need to vent comes from the wothless way we treat the world,,, this is one awesome poem,,, i like it,,,p.d.

  1. Date: 5/12/2011 12:26:00 PM
    Wow, nikko, this is beyond amazing! I could really feel it as I read it. I loved the premise, well, I loved every line! Definitely into my favs:) Hugs to you, Emilia

  1. Date: 5/11/2011 6:02:00 AM
    You guessed right Missy, somehow she tends to do it when we least expect it.. That is what makes her so beautiful.. She brings chaos but she also reminds us humans that we need each other to survive.. okay that's my two cents :) Really, really enjoyed this write of yours *hugs*

    na Avatar wala na
    Date: 5/11/2011 9:50:00 AM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    I think your two cents is very valuable missy ;) so hmm not just two cents ok? more like priceless ;) glad you enjoyed this one :) hugs back to you :)
  1. Date: 5/11/2011 3:10:00 AM
    Is" this your 229th poem? Neat!! Yes, I like the fact that nature now has the need to vent..of course it does! It has feelings too! Awesome...and unlike your other listings! Gwendolen

    na Avatar wala na
    Date: 5/11/2011 9:47:00 AM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    eep? not sure how many poems I have here now? Thanks so much Gwendolen :) yup venting sure can do wonders! :D
  1. Date: 5/10/2011 9:40:00 PM
    Heya Nikko. You did very well with this poem. Enjoy the mood and internal musing here. Ok, I was wondering about the numbers at the bottom of your poem. Obviously 05112011 is the date. Wot does 219a229 mean? My guess is that it is the in the morning?

    na Avatar wala na
    Date: 5/11/2011 9:46:00 AM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    see? this is weird. One has to click on one's poem to check if somebody replied?? oh well, not that it would matter to me now, Haha!
    Aechtner Avatar Chris D. Aechtner
    Date: 5/11/2011 9:05:00 AM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    Haha! I figured this reply feature would completely suck you in.
    na Avatar wala na
    Date: 5/10/2011 10:03:00 PM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    can you try to reply to my comment on yours so I can see if I get a note or something?? oh shucks, now I am going to be here forever O_o. not. good.
    na Avatar wala na
    Date: 5/10/2011 10:02:00 PM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    oh!!! haha no wonder it was italicized?? there's now a "reply to" feature! ooh. do you get notified that there's a reply to your reply???
  1. Date: 5/10/2011 9:08:00 PM
    A deep write from you nikko.liked the way you described the moon is covered by the clouds--Enjoyed...

    na Avatar wala na
    Date: 5/10/2011 10:04:00 PM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    Thank you, glad you enjoyed it-- Kashinath :)-- haha I just discovered this reply to thing today...
  1. Date: 5/10/2011 6:18:00 PM
    wow, Nikko. Another one from you that is stunning. I love when you write this way. WAs this for a contest??? soupmail

    na Avatar wala na
    Date: 5/10/2011 10:07:00 PM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    hi there sweetie :) you made me smile so much with what you say here-- :) nope not for a contest, just got inspired by the crickets, lol those & that we had strong rains here last Sunday and that got me thinking-- will reply to soupmail in a bit... hugs to you-- oh shucks this reply to thing is gonna get addictive --uh-oh!!!
  1. Date: 5/10/2011 5:39:00 PM
    My dear have that gift Nikko, to enlighten our, even gloomiest of day, and cause our comments to explode with joy ! Again my friend, you have given this poet reason to cogratulate you profound desire to please us here on the Soup ! ty love...have a wonderful weekend ful of inspiring writes my dear friend ! much love, james

    na Avatar wala na
    Date: 5/10/2011 10:16:00 PM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    Thank you so much James for your very inspiring comments-- when I read this, it makes me realize why i also love to write, thank you for -- continue writing your gems & enjoy your week! :)
  1. Date: 5/10/2011 4:06:00 PM
    Love the way you elude to rain by describing the moon hiding behind a curtain and letting teardrops fall, Nikko. Indeed, Nature does need to vent! And sometimes we see consequences like Japan is experiencing. Here I am dieting and you're describing making foods I love. You must be a great cook! Love and blessings in your new endeavors, Carolyn

    na Avatar wala na
    Date: 5/10/2011 10:19:00 PM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    Yes, just imagine if Nature couldn't vent... and I think all the more so since she has been burdened so much...haha oops, sorry about that! So nope, i will not mention food anymore-- but oh shucks, I was seriously considering writing a blog about food-- lol, hmm well we can just read and look and not eat :) lol
  1. Date: 5/10/2011 1:56:00 PM
    Deep and meaningful expressions analogical with nature, nikko

    na Avatar wala na
    Date: 5/10/2011 10:26:00 PM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    Thank you very much, Dr. Ram :) I enjoyed writing this one :)