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Breathing In Chaos

the crickets break the silence of the still, dark night the leaves stir in hushed waves as the wind whispers past the moon hides… shy behind her veiled curtain, she lets tears flow instead no crickets chirp the leaves weep as the winds wail and I— I breathe in the chaos, feel the cold dampen the world around me but my spirit for some reason is refreshed I guess nature also needs to vent 05112011219a229

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Gwendolen Song

Date: 5/26/2011 2:15:00 PM

Hi Nikko- Of course, nature does have to vent. You are absoltuely right..I never really thot about personifying nature in such a way as you have in this poem...I love it! Especially your free verse form...it's broken up in a way that allows the reader natural pauses after each thought... Lovely, Nikko. When does your book come out? :) Gwendolen

Skat A

Date: 5/26/2011 7:30:00 AM

I love the joy and turmoil of fresh air~luv*SKAT

Carolyn Devonshire

Date: 5/21/2011 1:18:00 PM

Hey, Nikko, thanks for your comment. I just lost 18 pounds but my body doesn't seem to want to go any further. Still want to lost at least 7 more pounds. Love from the elephant lady (And, drat, now you've got me missing my mom's apple pie. When will my care package arrive? LOL)

Carolyn Devonshire

Date: 5/15/2011 5:23:00 AM

Just wanted to ssay I'm glad you're enjoying new activities, Nikko. I need a break too. I'll try and be as productive as you. You're an inspiration. Love, Carolyn

Linda-Marie Sweetheart

Date: 5/13/2011 8:38:00 PM

thankxx for your sweet comments sweet Nikko friend .. hope u will enjoy a very happy weekend luv.. we are so relaxing ... much needed .. much desired... soon our home.. in a year or two luv..

Poet Destroyer A

Date: 5/13/2011 7:53:00 AM

i have an awesome way of thinking that pushing a baby in to this wolrd is chotic for the baby,,,lol once it takes its first breath its breathing in chaos..lol... gosh i have a wild imagination,, accck! <-- lol. (h) But you are right,, the essence that nature need to vent comes from the wothless way we treat the world,,, this is one awesome poem,,, i like it,,,p.d.

De R

Date: 5/12/2011 12:26:00 PM

Wow, nikko, this is beyond amazing! I could really feel it as I read it. I loved the premise, well, I loved every line! Definitely into my favs:) Hugs to you, Emilia

Wilma Neels

Date: 5/11/2011 6:02:00 AM

You guessed right Missy, somehow she tends to do it when we least expect it.. That is what makes her so beautiful.. She brings chaos but she also reminds us humans that we need each other to survive.. okay that's my two cents :) Really, really enjoyed this write of yours *hugs*

Kabuteng P.Ink K.
Date: 5/11/2011 9:50:00 AM

I think your two cents is very valuable missy ;) so hmm not just two cents ok? more like priceless ;) glad you enjoyed this one :) hugs back to you :)

Gwendolen Song

Date: 5/11/2011 3:10:00 AM

Is" this your 229th poem? Neat!! Yes, I like the fact that nature now has the need to vent..of course it does! It has feelings too! Awesome...and unlike your other listings! Gwendolen

Kabuteng P.Ink K.
Date: 5/11/2011 9:47:00 AM

eep? not sure how many poems I have here now? Thanks so much Gwendolen :) yup venting sure can do wonders! :D

Kash Poet

Date: 5/10/2011 9:08:00 PM

A deep write from you nikko.liked the way you described the moon is covered by the clouds--Enjoyed...

Kabuteng P.Ink K.
Date: 5/10/2011 10:04:00 PM

Thank you, glad you enjoyed it-- Kashinath :)-- haha I just discovered this reply to thing today...

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 5/10/2011 6:18:00 PM

wow, Nikko. Another one from you that is stunning. I love when you write this way. WAs this for a contest??? soupmail

Kabuteng P.Ink K.
Date: 5/10/2011 10:07:00 PM

hi there sweetie :) you made me smile so much with what you say here-- :) nope not for a contest, just got inspired by the crickets, lol those & that we had strong rains here last Sunday and that got me thinking-- will reply to soupmail in a bit... hugs to you-- oh shucks this reply to thing is gonna get addictive --uh-oh!!!

James Peranteau

Date: 5/10/2011 5:39:00 PM

My dear poet...you have that gift Nikko, to enlighten our, even gloomiest of day, and cause our comments to explode with joy ! Again my friend, you have given this poet reason to cogratulate you profound desire to please us here on the Soup ! ty love...have a wonderful weekend ful of inspiring writes my dear friend ! much love, james

Kabuteng P.Ink K.
Date: 5/10/2011 10:16:00 PM

Thank you so much James for your very inspiring comments-- when I read this, it makes me realize why i also love to write, thank you for -- continue writing your gems & enjoy your week! :)

Carolyn Devonshire

Date: 5/10/2011 4:06:00 PM

Love the way you elude to rain by describing the moon hiding behind a curtain and letting teardrops fall, Nikko. Indeed, Nature does need to vent! And sometimes we see consequences like Japan is experiencing. Here I am dieting and you're describing making foods I love. You must be a great cook! Love and blessings in your new endeavors, Carolyn

Kabuteng P.Ink K.
Date: 5/10/2011 10:19:00 PM

Yes, just imagine if Nature couldn't vent... and I think all the more so since she has been burdened so much...haha oops, sorry about that! So nope, i will not mention food anymore-- but oh shucks, I was seriously considering writing a blog about food-- lol, hmm well we can just read and look and not eat :) lol

Dr.Ram Mehta

Date: 5/10/2011 1:56:00 PM

Deep and meaningful expressions analogical with nature, nikko

Kabuteng P.Ink K.
Date: 5/10/2011 10:26:00 PM

Thank you very much, Dr. Ram :) I enjoyed writing this one :)