Bad Sleep

With draggy eyes Ascending slumbers boundry Vivid weeping dreams... ps a haiku of sorts,i guess.

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Carol Sunshine Brown

Date: 6/10/2011 7:01:00 AM

Congratulations on your poetry being featured this week Gary. It is an honor to be on the list with you this week. May you find the inspiration to keep you writing. Love, Carol

Gary Bechter

Date: 6/7/2011 9:31:00 AM

Thank you all for the comments.I am not on soup very much because of lack of time.All of your comments are recieved with appreciation. G.

Dr.Ram Mehta

Date: 6/7/2011 8:25:00 AM

My congratulations on your poem being featured this week, gary

Linda-Marie Sweetheart

Date: 6/5/2011 5:20:00 PM

Congrats Gary on your featured poem this week on PS.. a wonderful write to share with us all my friend with luv..

Kabuteng P.Ink K.

Date: 8/9/2010 8:31:00 AM

your last line was just captivating, Gary! Speaking of sleep, I need to catch me some shuteye-- but this was a wonderful read :) - thanks for sharing :) --& I suppose this can be listed as senryu? I'm no expert but since this deals with human nature? -- nikko :)

Dr.Ram Mehta

Date: 8/7/2010 7:42:00 PM

A nice haiku nicely penned, gary

Skat A

Date: 8/7/2010 12:05:00 PM

Liked the second line, Enjoyed the haiku *LUV~S.K.A.T.