At the Edge

White wakes trail festive party boats
Beach dweller eyes with envy
     Lonely cactus on desert sand
          Not even parasites invade
               Needles repel everything, everyone

Never to exchange vows
Give birth, spoil grandchildren
Tossing in her king-size bed for endless nights
     No king
          Eternity in a cocoon
               Years pass, hopes dim

Friends complain
Messy husbands, custody battles
No custodians seek empty hearts
     She beckons the sun to set
          Prays to reach heaven’s gate
               ‘Fore it rises again

Enduring dread
Puffs of smoke from burnt-out life
Circle in her dimly-lit room, then dissipate
     No last will or legacy bestowed
          Memories of her life
                    Rest only in souls who have passed
Copyright © | Year Posted 2010


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Date: 4/10/2012 5:32:00 PM
Congratultions Carolyn on your win!! I know this place...big huggsss, love deb...well done my dear friend
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Date: 4/10/2012 1:06:00 PM
Congratulations on your win in P.D's "Emotional" contest Carolyn. Love, Carol
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Date: 4/10/2012 12:06:00 PM
Carolyn congrats on your win, great words..David
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Date: 4/10/2012 10:24:00 AM
congrats on your win cory
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Date: 6/27/2011 7:35:00 AM
Congratulations on your win in Debbie's "Emote" contest Carolyn. Love, Carol
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Date: 6/23/2011 7:55:00 AM
You have included every possible emotion on the road to a woman's depression....excellent, Carolyn!! The fall into that deep well....frightening and sad!
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Date: 6/22/2011 8:06:00 PM
I really like how you formatted this one, Carolyn, goes so well with what you say here, like a spiraling down of emotions--- Super congrats on your win! :) hugs
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Date: 6/22/2011 3:50:00 PM
Great writing Carolyn. I hope you do not feel this way often. Congratulations on your win. Love, Joyce
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Date: 6/22/2011 2:57:00 PM
Yes I was so with you on this "ride" AM so with you dear...I think it was fine without the capitals. In Free Verse I myself use them only at the beginning of a thought and the period at the end of a thought but content in Free Verse is the thing for me and you have some serious content here! Congrad's on your big win. Light & Love
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Date: 5/1/2011 10:39:00 PM
Carolyn, I like the topic you chose for doing your stream of thought. VEry interesting one to read. Congratulations.
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Date: 4/29/2011 11:33:00 AM
Congratulations on your win Carolyn in Debbie's contest. Love, Carol
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Date: 4/28/2011 11:56:00 PM
Great writing and great win Carolyn. I hardly knew what she wanted and I guess I guessed wrong I was shut out on this one. It's hard to get in to some poet's minds .Yoours is a winner in any standard. Love, Joyce
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Date: 4/28/2011 11:03:00 AM
Many congrats Carolyn for big win in Debbies contest. Helpless minuscle Mind bitter & bitten with bug of loneliness on Kingsize bed !!! Luv & best wishes - Hitendra Mehta
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Date: 4/28/2011 7:42:00 AM
Congratulations on the fourth place win in the contest, Carolyn
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Date: 4/28/2011 6:21:00 AM
many warm congrats for this win.
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Date: 4/28/2011 1:44:00 AM
darkly beautiful, carols! beautifully expressed! sweet cheers for the great win! :)huggs!
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Date: 4/27/2011 5:38:00 PM
The twists and turns of the consciousness are so like the life you describe....here there and everywhere they go....and then are gone. What a touching end to your poem! Congratulations, Carolyn!
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Date: 4/26/2011 11:39:00 AM
Congrats on your HM in the contest.....George
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Date: 4/26/2011 6:50:00 AM
Oh, such a sad write - let's hope she finds a king for her bed soon! Many congrats, my friend : )
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Date: 4/26/2011 5:15:00 AM
Congratulations on your win in the contest Carolyn. Love, Carol
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Date: 4/25/2011 1:38:00 PM
I am in love with this poem!!! It's all in the perspective, isn't it? So many well-described examples of being on the edge. I couldn't decide which line I liked the most....the king sized bed with no king...there was a time I had some very similar emotions...then I changed my perspective on the events in my life. Off to the FAVs box! Make the rain go away here in Ohio, Carolyn. Gwendolen
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Date: 4/25/2011 1:26:00 PM
Excellent write Carolyn very stream of conscious ;) Congrad's Light & Love
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Date: 3/14/2011 8:20:00 PM
Gosh, a sad one, very powerful too, CArolyn. I can't recall that I saw it before. It is an older one, right? Nicely done, nicely won!!
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Date: 3/11/2011 1:00:00 PM
Carolyn, this is a very intense experience as I read it again and again...almost real.....i hope not too real for you personally....best wishes...Syd
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Date: 3/9/2011 12:54:00 PM
congrats on getting your poems into the first round! thanks for your comments and encouragement! good luck to you! this was a really fantastic read with a great style! -Madison
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