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Asylum Admission

control was the crucial key evading limits of sanity resolutely focused on normality determined to linger unwaveringly vague lines of uncertainty that gradually blur inevitably as reason loses clarity boundary crossed perplexedly control was the crucial key © September 2013—Kim van Breda

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Mike Bayles

Date: 10/22/2013 2:04:00 PM

I like this poem. It reflects the person's state of mind well.

Kim Van Breda
Date: 10/22/2013 2:08:00 PM

Thanks Mike-- an honest reflection.

Joseph May

Date: 10/7/2013 10:29:00 PM

well penned Kim.....best wishes

Bl Devnath

Date: 10/5/2013 8:13:00 AM

It's a great poem penned from the deepest feeling and you have shown excellently how the unseen qualities of mind can be controlled with the key of consciousness. A nice creation of inner thoughts. Lovely done. Loved always, bl

Ralph Mason

Date: 9/30/2013 9:16:00 PM

well done Kim. I like how you start and end on the same line. Feels like a never ending circle. Warm thoughts, Ralph

Nette Onclaud

Date: 9/30/2013 1:02:00 PM

thought-provoking with lines that captures the borderline between being sane and not... i once wrote a one-liner in high-school that went: " to be sane is to have moments of sanity.."... greeat stuff!..:) huggs

Jon A Cavanaugh

Date: 9/30/2013 8:31:00 AM

Very well done. Bravo!

Poet Tacito

Date: 9/30/2013 7:41:00 AM

Yes! I love this. One of your stronger writings yet. Such a battle of self & sanity in your lines. Awesome job!

Kim Van Breda
Date: 9/30/2013 7:45:00 AM

Thanks Drake You are always one of the first to comment on my scribbling's and I love you for that-- and of course your ongoing encouragement.