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Another Old Haiku

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Another Old Haiku

Night's blackness obscures
our very limited view.
Does dawn surprise us?

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  1. Date: 2/18/2012 10:14:00 AM
    I know very little about Haiku (about most things in fact) but I think that an obscured, limited view could make one see nothing at all...I like to read Haiku upside-down and all around...It gives a new perspective...Yes dawn can surprise and blackness can obscure...I enjoyed reading very much and I'm glad to see so many "new' ones.

  1. Date: 2/18/2012 12:25:00 AM
    An interesting haiku. Give the reader words to make one think. Take care, Jancarl I understand it all.

  1. Date: 2/17/2012 9:39:00 PM
    Lines one and two are very nice but drop the caps and punc. You actually have a double negative I just notice i lines 1 and 2. If you obscure a limited view you would actually make the view better. Just a thought. You may like to reword. I like the premis. Line three is intellectualizing, when you should be describing what the dawn IS doing. Or rather what is happening as dawn approaches.

  1. Date: 2/17/2012 6:15:00 PM
    Very great work that I enjoyed reading..Yes, dawn does surprise me sometimes....Creative idea..Your presence at my work was uplifting..Sara