After Life

As i sit
in my room
i think
and think
then i look over
see the blade think of my life
how much i hate it
how much it sucks
then i take the blade
and slit my wrist
then
its over
i cant change it
its over im gone
dead
forever. 
Then,
i see people
all sad,
like me
i go over
and talk to them,
they seem nice,
we have a lot in common
we all commited suicide
we all hated our life
 we were all,
depressed
we were in another life
just not the real world
a whole new world
dead people everwhere
almost like
a spirtit of some sort
and then
we realised
all of us
there
together
for once in our life
we were happy.
Copyright © | Year Posted 2011


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Date: 2/5/2011 5:35:00 PM
this is an intense poem. You have alot of talent. My only advice is for you to use more "Form" don't put "I don't know" no one will read it. goodluck julie
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Date: 2/5/2011 2:00:00 PM
Interesting.
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Date: 2/4/2011 10:01:00 PM
There really is no other life than the one you are experiencing right now. Your work is not that bad. I just hope you are not serious.
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