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Adam: All our Innocence Gone

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Adam: All our Innocence Gone

For Suzette’s Roundel contest based on Milton's 'Paradise Lost'  

As I watch you depart from my life
And your tempter is leading you on,
It appears you forget you’re my wife,
All our innocence gone.

I could try to repair what is wrong,
But the serpent is twisting the knife
As you dance to the tune of its song.

I am begging you, ‘Please end this strife,’
But the apple’s appeal is so strong,
And the sin of the world will be rife:
All our innocence gone.


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  1. Date: 5/29/2013 7:07:00 PM
    Excellent Jack, you convey the twist of the knife well, very concise, emotional work.

  1. Date: 5/14/2013 4:30:00 AM
    Well done! Congrats to you on your win in the challenge.

  1. Date: 5/11/2013 10:35:00 PM
    Hi Jack,CONGRATULATIONS on your awesome win. Take care and enjoy the blessings of today and tomorrow. LUV*LINDA

  1. Date: 5/11/2013 5:43:00 PM
    Lovely roundel, Jack. Congrats on your win with this gem. :-)

  1. Date: 5/11/2013 4:47:00 PM
    Jack this is wonderful. I enjoyed your take on this tthe me. Congratulations on your win. Warm Smiles, Connie

  1. Date: 5/11/2013 1:33:00 AM
    Congratulation Jack: An interesting POV Enjoyed it very much. SuZ

  1. Date: 5/11/2013 1:20:00 AM
    Congratulations on obtaining an HM in my PARADISE LOST - ROUNDEL contest, Jack. It was not an easy form or topic to write on. Love, Su

  1. Date: 5/5/2013 7:47:00 PM
    Reading this write from your heart, Jack, reminds me of what a good writer you are...You'll do well to put all that energy into writing, my friend...Let something good come out of all the negative. Excellent writing as always. Always, Annalise

  1. Date: 5/5/2013 5:32:00 PM
    I understand where this is coming from in your life my friend! I do have to say that your situation, though not good, has produced a fantastic write here! I am quite impressed with this incredible piece, Great Work!!

  1. Date: 5/5/2013 4:48:00 PM
    Masterful!! Good luck in the contest Jack... Terry

  1. Date: 5/5/2013 4:43:00 PM
    Great work that you have penned bringing the original sin to present day..Reads like a winner to me..Good luck in the contest..Thanks for stopping by..Sara

  1. Date: 5/5/2013 3:18:00 PM
    a nice poem. SandyIvy

  1. Date: 5/5/2013 3:00:00 PM
    Hello Jack, hope you are well. This is a good poem for SU's contest.. a deep cutting image.. good luck in the contest..LINDA