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A Woman Said to the Universe (Adaptation)

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A Woman Said to the Universe (Adaptation)

A woman said to the universe:
"Sir, see me as equal!"
"I hear you," replied the universe,
"But I can't see you 
Because that tall man's head is blocking your face."

Adaption from Steven Crane's "A Man Said to the Universe"

A man said to the universe: 
"Sir I exist!" 
"However," replied the universe, 
"The fact has not created in me 
A sense of obligation."

When I was 18 Steven Crane's poem was pasted over my desk at work.  It has always been 
a source of inspiration and intrigue.

Copyright © Carolyn Devonshire

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  1. Date: 1/22/2010 10:27:00 PM
    I think there for I am (Yaaaawn!) and now I think I'm a tired man. Good night Carolyn. Great Work Again. Best Wishes Always, Bill

  1. Date: 1/10/2010 3:34:00 PM
    Dang! 'zis mean I gotta put on my flats again?:) It is very intriguing along with mr crane's . Thanks for your comments,Carolyn.

  1. Date: 12/14/2009 3:30:00 AM
    this made me smile ;)

  1. Date: 12/3/2009 1:58:00 PM
    Excellent piece.

  1. Date: 11/22/2009 8:39:00 PM
    Carolyn, Thanks for kind commenting on my poem "Little Minds at Christmas" I loved James Whitcom Riley's poems especially his way of projecting his version of a childs view. Times have changed since then but childrens views are somewhat the same. My poem "Santa's Little Worrier" was published this week in a local newspaper. Thanks so much Carolyn

  1. Date: 11/21/2009 5:49:00 PM
    very intriguing, Nice poems, enjoyed reading today!

  1. Date: 11/20/2009 12:08:00 PM
    FANTASTIC! adaptation, Carolyn. Love, Lainie

  1. Date: 11/19/2009 9:48:00 AM
    Women are created equal. A saying I'm sure everyone is familiar with. Woman was not created from mans head to be above him, or from his foot to be beneath him. but from his rib to be equal to him. Nice poem. A. W. Nutter

  1. Date: 11/17/2009 11:52:00 PM
    Hi, Carolyn...this poem will do justice: men and women on the scale with equal balances! Women have always been considered inferior...this is machismo on the part of men. In God's presence we are all equal and your poem confirms that! Very inspiring poem and thought-provoking. It was a delightful read. God bless you and may He inspire you always. Love and hugs, Andrew.

  1. Date: 11/16/2009 10:07:00 PM
    you have Soup mail,,Blessings..Cecil,and Thank you for always reading and commenting on my words,,,Blessings..Cecil

  1. Date: 11/14/2009 7:02:00 PM
    Nice take on the classic poem! Have you ever read O.Henry's poetry. He wrote a poem called "Vanity" which is quite moving. Peace & Blessings Matthew Anish

  1. Date: 11/14/2009 6:17:00 PM
    Very good Adaptation, Carolyn! Great job! Peace and love, Audrey! Thanks for taking the time to read and comment on my poems. Peace and love, Audrey

  1. Date: 11/12/2009 9:16:00 AM
    Do I detect humor? How are you old love? I hope all your social obligations are being resolved beautifully. Love, daver

  1. Date: 11/11/2009 9:53:00 PM
    definitely a great write my friend,written from an adaptation of a great style and then you placed your creativity and talent within,,, full of the wonders and expectations and reality the way it should be,,I wish you great luck in the contest,Blessings..Cecil

  1. Date: 11/10/2009 1:07:00 PM
    This is really really good Carolyn! Great Adaption Steven Crane's work is filled with inspiration!! Thanks for the welcome comments! ~Jen~

  1. Date: 11/10/2009 9:18:00 AM
    Carolyn, this is wonderful! Exactly too . A wonderful entry, good luck! Always a pleasure to see and read you my talented friend! Once a while ago at PS, Carolyn Devonshire's poetry came across my screen and I've been hooked on her ever since. What an inspiration and what a great friend ;)

  1. Date: 11/9/2009 9:34:00 AM
    This is a potent write Carolyn,......To be or not to be ?...........I'm still fantasizing on a comback for that one ! *smiles* All mine life ! Love james

  1. Date: 11/8/2009 5:45:00 PM
    I love this....Stephen Crane, I know his work...I love "I once saw a man pursuing the horizon, round and round they spinned; I accosted the man. "It is futile," I said. "You can never-" "You lie!" he cried, and ran on." That is my favorite. Yes, I have found a peace, and thank you for your kind words. Love, Sara:)

  1. Date: 11/8/2009 5:38:00 PM
    Marvelous interpretation Carolyn. I can't comment on the nature of sexual discrimination the universe implies, even though I imagine it would blame that notion on the fear filled human ego. I would ask the universe if I exist and see what it says. I can't prove it any more then Descartes could in his philosophies book. "I think therefore I am", to which I would say "prove it Descartes", "prove it universe","prove it God", only to find none of them can, least of all me.

  1. Date: 11/8/2009 12:25:00 PM
    I love this poem...Made me smile....Marty