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A Robin's Eggshell Color

. Never looking up to see the sky A "Robin's eggshell" color Nor noticing or appreciating The sun's golden hue As it rose each day Only seeing, breathing, feeling work~ Labor intensive work~ Capturing each thought Holding bondage each breath As each long hot day passed Turning into years of misery Early in the morning about the breaking of dawn "Backed by a choir of ten thousand crickets" Their voices mixed in with the music "reached up to touch heaven with a song" Their heads bowed looking at the cotton crop That held them prisoners for a lifetime Wondering if, if there was any hope of redemption Since they were tied to the land in bondage to scrape out a livin' What is the rest of the story for it is unfinished 'til this day "Closer" by Chris Aechtner "Robin's Eggshell" "Cotton Pickin' Paradise" by Tim Ryerson "Backed by a choir of ten thousand crickets" "Reaching up to touch heaven with a song" Sponor: Debbie Guzzi Contest: Referential I based it somewhat on my parents telling about how they worked as children in the cotton fields, corn patches, gardens, etc. Then they left the farm and went to the cotton mills and some of the descendence from these two families rose above the poverty of both places..There was one doctor, one Lt. Colonel in the Coast Guard, and many more occupations scattered thorough out families that came from that poverty situation..

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Date: 7/18/2013 10:11:00 PM
Hi Sara, Nice to see you on Debbie Guzzi, winning list...... Congratulations! Hugs* SKAT
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Date: 7/18/2013 2:45:00 PM
My grandprents on Mom's side worked in woolen mills, blueberry factories and then at the end of their lifes the worst!!! a fisherie handling cold dead fish all day! Congrad's on your fine work winning! Light & Love
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Date: 7/18/2013 4:24:00 AM
I can see the water barrel standing under a huge tree at the end of the row. The cotton fields were not kind, but they were work.... Hard work. The water was cool and the dipper was welcomed by my parched lips. Sara, your words brought memories from a past I'd almost forgotten. This is one of your finest.... Love ya, Darlin'... Jake
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Date: 7/17/2013 5:02:00 PM
riveting write that explores the struggles and triumphs of hard work... sweet congrats on your award. sara..:) huggs
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Date: 7/17/2013 6:58:00 AM
congrats on a great win Sara
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Date: 7/17/2013 3:40:00 AM
Well Sara, I have read many of your poems over the years and in my humble opinion, this is the best I have seen from you...I am stunned and honored that you chose part of my poem as inspiration...Us both being from the south and being part of the same generation, I can see how you could identify...Congratulations my friend - Tim
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Date: 7/16/2013 5:23:00 PM
Congrats on your win my sweet friend. Loved always, bl
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Date: 7/2/2013 2:21:00 PM
Very cleverly portrayed scene of lifes experience and toils also resolve Sara, so pleased to have visited today..'
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Date: 6/30/2013 7:23:00 PM
Wonderful entry, Sara: It comes from your heart. SuZ
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Date: 6/30/2013 3:08:00 PM
Awesome write Sara ;} you have a blessed day ;}
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Date: 6/29/2013 3:31:00 PM
love this write inspired by your family, Sara - I bet your mom and dad would love this
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Date: 6/29/2013 7:30:00 AM
Wow, such a exquisite write my friend, I know what you mean, it could be taken the wrong way but I know this is artistic license, and done masterfully Sara! I really enjoyed reading this enlightening poem this morning! What an outstanding piece, Great Work!!
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