A Puddle

i did one day stumble down a lane on a puddle that wanted for nowhere to go it sat without ripple right in the middle of an alley that wanted not for road not did shadow cover nor follow its particular spot while it did borrow from what not hollow could top

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Carolyn Devonshire

Date: 4/23/2009 8:50:00 AM

What a talented writer you are! Right now I'm feeling like the puddle you describe, sitting without ripple in the middle of an alley that wanted not for road. Amazing work. Where have you been hiding?

Denis Joe

Date: 3/6/2009 12:37:00 PM

This is really lovely, I even think that the lack of pounctuation is justified. the sounds of the words are brilliant. There is a childishness to it that is the strength of the poem. A real pleasure to read!