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A FORMal Evening

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A FORMal Evening

Haibun trying to read your mind from afar,
sitting acrostic from you at the bar.
Iamb itching to sit on the stool beside you,
but somebody's sonnet - and I don't think she'll move.
Are we just a couplet of friends having drinks?
Maybe you quintella me what you think.
I feel giddy and dizain without any warning,
and I know I'm going to feel verse in the morning.
But we've been playing footles and it feels so right,
so why not just tanka me home tonight?

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  1. Date: 7/22/2013 11:57:00 AM
    This was PERFECT !!! Loved the play on poetry......"but somebody's sonnet......" that cracked me up !!!!

  1. Date: 7/20/2013 3:53:00 AM
    Feather, my fear - Please do my ego a favor and check out 'Coming Out of the Cage'...It uses similar word play as this though it falls far short of yours, which in my opinion is pure comic genius...

  1. Date: 7/20/2013 12:14:00 AM
    Ha super write heather Congratulations on your win xx

  1. Date: 7/19/2013 7:59:00 PM
    lol... Very clever right, Heather. Congrats on your win. Love, Flaming Pancake

  1. Date: 7/19/2013 5:32:00 PM
    HAHAHA!...VERY lever Weather!...I think I'm falling in shove with you, will you carry me yesterday, or shall I impose first?...Neither way, I'm tame if you are...Of coors, we'll need to have flood tests first to make sure we're compactable...Conflagurations and rest wishbones in the suture - Rim Tyerson

    Ryerson Avatar Tim Ryerson
    Date: 7/19/2013 5:37:00 PM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    I also dove the way you misuse different poetess formals here two...
  1. Date: 7/19/2013 5:05:00 PM
    this is nice.... Skat

  1. Date: 7/19/2013 4:45:00 PM
    Brilliant, Heather. Congratulations on a superb win. Licia :-)

  1. Date: 7/19/2013 3:26:00 PM
    Heather, Congratulations on your winning poem..pd

  1. Date: 7/19/2013 3:24:00 PM
    Really good, Heather! Just a little shorter than required. Congratulations on your fine win! Cheers, Roy.

  1. Date: 6/24/2013 5:08:00 AM
    Oh I love this very clever poem. You've put a huge smile on my face to start my day. Thank you.

  1. Date: 6/17/2013 12:11:00 PM
    That's awesome, Heather. You are slick! It's a fave, of course. Kimo-ver here and gimme a high five!

  1. Date: 6/15/2013 1:55:00 PM
    thanks, btw for liking my poetry. Wouldn't it be neat one day if we could take all our faves and make an anthology of soup favorites??

  1. Date: 6/15/2013 1:54:00 PM
    this ADORABLE playing on words. You make me want to try it myself. I ought to!!!

  1. Date: 6/15/2013 11:29:00 AM
    lol, love this witty write

  1. Date: 6/14/2013 6:46:00 PM
    Girl.....this is a work of art!!!! Wow....astounded by you!!!! Playing footles, eh? Be sure you'll be tankad alright!!!!

  1. Date: 6/14/2013 12:11:00 PM
    myyy, a smorgasbord of poetic delicacies to sweeten the whole brew...i really enjoyed where you took this!. keep it up and shine on!... inimitable, heather..:) huggs

  1. Date: 6/14/2013 11:23:00 AM
    Phantasmagorical!! And very clever to use poetry forms! Tough to beat!

  1. Date: 6/14/2013 11:15:00 AM
    very clever Heather love it xx

  1. Date: 6/14/2013 10:50:00 AM
    You have Iambic'd my Pentameter. ;) I love the wanton forwardness & initiative in the ending. It's a great mindset to have.