Violence Sorting

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Written: December 15, 2023 _____________________________________________ It is undeniable that anguish prevails It hovers close to a lilting voice There are no strains to rejoice Once the beat soars, its genesis tweaks. Giving alms is obvious Beyond the ethics of the tithing ritual Coins jingle, evoking a sound A decrease in the supply of food. Newborns lack hearing and verbal ability The elderly sage dresses chaotically Elfin babies desire soft touch and warmth Akin to their late mother's calming palm. Completely lacking in decency Deep, the ears were concealed Whilst untamed jaws sow turmoil It sinks as a modest, rusted nail. The crowd heartily jeered Tears fell over their faces relentlessly Failure was diligently earned Mass disgust reached high levels. The whips roared with mirth Frames grudgingly bore this duty Correct ideals will be reinstated Inept debt must be repaid in full.

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Hiya Sharma

Date: 12/17/2023 8:04:00 AM

Sigh, this is such a deeply evocative and poignant write, dear Sotto. You've so soulfully depicted the pain of all those who suffer from the adversities of violence and rage that prevail in this world, unfortunately.. The wordplay here is absolutely captivating with brilliant rhymes that contribute to such an impeccable flow of this poem.. "Newborns lack hearing and verbal ability", "Tears fell over their faces relentlessly", "Inept debt must be repaid in full." Gosh, soul stirring this is..

Paige Hind

Date: 12/16/2023 8:04:00 PM

So many forms of violence- why does Humanity find so many ways to do it? An insightful poem, very much said...

Vijay Pandit

Date: 12/16/2023 5:55:00 AM

I felt the intensity of your poem, my friend. Your words echo the turmoil in life of many suffering from lack of resources. A thoughtful write, Lasaad.

Sara Etgen-Baker

Date: 12/16/2023 5:14:00 AM

dearest Sotto--I found this poem soulful and deep, filled with gut-wrenching truths. This verse tore at my hear "Completely lacking in decency Deep, the ears were concealed Whilst untamed jaws sow turmoil It sinks as a modest, rusted nail." I agree with the last line, "inept debt must be paid." Powerful hope in those words. Have a pleasant weekend, your poetess friend in Texas, Sara

Ink Empress

Date: 12/16/2023 1:00:00 AM

You’ve shared your thoughts in an eloquent manner as always dr sotto. Brilliant flow and rhythm and such profound truths, delivered here. “ Newborns lack hearing and verbal ability” this is gut wrenching and hits deep! “ Completely lacking in decency Deep, the ears were concealed” unfortunately these linee resonate as we witness this today and for many, how this has been going on and like your last lines said, inept debt must be paid in full. This is such a soulful write. Felt so much reading