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Undertow

We met on the seam 
between two drownings,
his cuff snagged in the kelp, 
my mouth lined with moss.
He grinned 
like a man who'd forgotten the surface,
held out his hand like a memory.

I took it.

We spun a waltz—
water-logged feet brushing 
the roof of the wreck, 
the nape of our need. 

My dress leaked its scales, 
his coat shed pastured wool,
each step stirring 
the schools of ash-bright fish
undulating in rhythm.

When the tide pulled harder, 
he didn’t let go.
When the tide pulled harder, 
neither did I.

What else could we do
but dance, 
until the water conceded—
we were breathing inside her.
Copyright © | Year Posted 2025

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Kendrick Avatar
June 22, 2025 at 5:41 PM
Congratulations on your winner. Way to go. Sara K
Thomas Avatar
June 23, 2025 at 2:41 PM
Thanks, Sara. It was fun to go through past contests and pick which of the N/As or low scorers might be better matched under another sponsor. It's a lot like matching your work to a specific journal or magazine -- often the rejection isn't about the piece but rather a preference. I can live with that :)
Carmack Avatar
June 22, 2025 at 12:19 PM
Congrats Jaymee. Loved the poem, especially the first stanza.
Thomas Avatar
June 22, 2025 at 12:50 PM
Thanks so much, Rob. I think I got dead last in a previous contest, so that was my screwed part lol -- sharing third is a BIG step up :)
Kendrick Avatar
May 2, 2025 at 1:22 PM
Congratulations on this winner. Way to go. So delighted to see it on the winners' list. Sara K
Thomas Avatar
May 2, 2025 at 1:35 PM
Oh, Sara. That's so sweet of you to comment. Brian is a tough judge - I was surprised and happy to see I placed. Yours was really well done too. Keep on keeping on, as they say :)
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