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(not about me, just a challenge where you are given ten words and have to incorporate them into a poem. I used to do many of those kinds of challenges. Do they ever do them here? They really are great at inspiring people to create!) Topaz Atop his pedestal, a golden girl was I, Who never wanted to be up so high. For though I was a gem, I was no diamond, and we came undone just after we began! Why could he not accept the humanness in me? Such inconvenient truth he could not see. A doubt I’d had in him, he took for treachery, and so it was that he indicted me. No matter what I said, his anger overgrew. I waited, fearful of what would ensue. He knew at last that I was not his counterpart and tossed me off then with a hardened heart. Then like some hoary seer, he made a prophecy I’d have no other man as good as he. But he has proved to be a prophet false indeed. A simple topaz, sparkling gold, I’m freed!

Copyright © | Year Posted 2010




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Date: 2/2/2019 11:28:00 PM
greatly written and enjoyed I- A simple topaz, sparkling gold, I’m freed!/// beautiful poem
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Date: 1/29/2019 12:33:00 PM
Very good ,I love it
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Date: 1/4/2013 11:37:00 PM
a deep way to take my imagination,,, some guys make it seem as if they are good as gold... and then later you find out they are gold plated...LOL...love this..PD
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Date: 12/11/2012 9:42:00 AM
i love the humaness in you Andrea, as i do this wonderful poemmmm
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Date: 10/25/2012 9:49:00 AM
I never read this beautiful poem of you!!I am thinking what were the 10 words that you were given!
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Date: 3/10/2010 2:13:00 PM
A lovely poem Andrea, I enjoyed . A super poem enjoyed. I wrote a poem "Echoes in the stone". I would really enjoy a comment. Comming from u. I tried my best on my grammer, tell me what u really think. IRMA
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Date: 2/19/2010 11:26:00 AM
Nice poem Andrea, the pictures I've used lately can be found in my blog photos. Give yourself a chance and try to write a haiku. If you need any help please soup mail me...Raul
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Date: 1/28/2010 7:28:00 AM
Really liked how you turned those 10 words into a gem of a poem, Andrea! I find it amazing actually how the same words can conjure different scenarios with different writers--I totally agree with you about the challenges, it does inspire so much creativity, it works for me, actually makes my brain cells work ;) and I just love making these stories in my head and turning it into poems :) Super thanks for adding my Word Weaver to your faves :), totally honored by it :)
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Date: 1/27/2010 8:35:00 AM
Sounds like a fun contest, Andrea. Pehaps you could present a challenge. Give us 10 words. this is a great idea and a great poem. Love, Lainie
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Date: 1/27/2010 7:53:00 AM
You must really be alleviated now, Andrea. Yes, the idea of using words as a challenge is really good. And thank you for your always kind comments...Love, Gert
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Date: 1/26/2010 9:06:00 PM
He deserved it all!<: i believe these types of poems make people's imagination grow. this is a great poem. he's something else.haha.. and im so glad my poems make you think! thats my biggest goal. and your right im too young to know of a -Johnny Angel- it sounds like a nice song though. i think i'll listen to it!
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Date: 1/26/2010 8:48:00 PM
Awesome, Andrea!! You met this challenge head on....I love this idea of using words as a challenge....perhaps you yourself will host such a contest sometime?? Great idea, and a great poem! Love, Carrie....ps...I really thank you for catching my typo..I hate it when I do that, and appreciate your keen eye. :)
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Date: 1/26/2010 3:24:00 PM
The last stanza is LOL wonderful here, Andrea ... excellent write ... and, you can start any kind of challenge or contest but I'm not sure how ... anyway, thanks for all your recent comments and I've added you to my cake blog ... mine's coming up soon so from Aquarian to Virgo thanks for being at the Soup!!
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Date: 1/26/2010 2:40:00 PM
yes my poem the other side is a suicide letter. that's how I feel alot of times.
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Date: 1/26/2010 1:30:00 PM
Interesting write considering that you had to use certain words in the write. Keep the creative pen flowing. Thanks for stopping by and commenting on my work. Sara
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Date: 1/26/2010 1:23:00 PM
BINGO!! I have an idea.. this would be a great idea for a contest for members on the Soup.. once u become a premium member u could sponsor it ... or... lets talk about it via Soup Mail when u can .. maybe I could use the format to sponsor it.. what say u??? luv.. Linda-Marie..
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Date: 1/26/2010 1:21:00 PM
Neat idea Andrea.. good use of the word and topaz is a beautiful jewelry stone as I am an avid fan of quality jewelry especially gems... like your poem.. is a gem... my racy poetry is on a roll as I am involved in a three way collaboration with two other poets and they have challenged me to express myself totally.. trying to keep it OK for the Soup has been the challenge though.. will let u know when its finished so u can read it.. soon... thankxxx for your great comments... luv.. Linda-Marie
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Date: 1/26/2010 12:26:00 PM
new poem posted
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Date: 1/26/2010 8:28:00 AM
That'll show him! Great poem Andrea! Well written. enjoyed-Robert
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Date: 1/26/2010 8:12:00 AM
Awesome write Andrea, I loved it! Jeralynn
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