Song of The Red-Tailed Hawk No 10: AABB

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Poetic Form: Crown of Sonnets: Couplet
Inspired: 2023 December 19
Image: Red-tailed Hawk by eBird

Red-tailed Hawk - eBird

Less than eighty, now ... they're, unaccounted. 'Tis sad ... NEXT: the hawk hovered that founded fresh sedges, grasslands, and deserts idyll, God in the detail, Red-Tailed Hawk sidle, Blitzkrieg mob by crows, females sized greater, social-less wingers, life mono-mater, dives one hundred twenty miles per hour, kills owl young BOTH nesting competitor, Prey spotted one hundred feet in the air, Their eyesight to man, seven times finer, Two feet, two pounds, twenty-one years lifespan, Roadkill, hunting, and human expansion, Diet: various birds, and small rodents, Scrub deserts, farm fields, rainforests, woodlands.

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Sara Etgen-Baker

Date: 12/19/2023 2:35:00 PM

enjoyed your vivid imagery and your tale of the red-tailed hawk. Tragic that such majestic creatures are are slowly dwindling. Loved this line: 'blitzkreig mob by crows.' that line caught my attention. Have a splendid evening, Sara

Hilo Poet
Date: 12/19/2023 4:32:00 PM

Ditto that, Sara. There's a needed change if ever you should read this note--hoping that you do, if so, read my post to Ink Empress and hopefully, it'll clarify my error. Aloha, William

Silent One

Date: 12/19/2023 11:49:00 AM

Your poem beautifully captures the essence of the red-tailed hawk, merging scientific precision with poetic grace. The opening lines, 'Less than eighty, now ... they're, unaccounted,' immediately set the tone for a contemplative piece that delves into the nature of this majestic bird...

Hilo Poet
Date: 12/19/2023 12:08:00 PM

Oy vey, Silent One. I just did a redo--usually, I've handle these oddly due to the circumstances, read my comment below to Ink Empress where airs my dilemma. I leave the line separately until I'm ready to conjure as add-on's--thought I proof read, but as you're keenly aware, my mind was elsewhere, ugh S O R R Y--you're probably sensing another baby...mayhaps. Aloha, William

Ink Empress

Date: 12/19/2023 10:50:00 AM

This is a very unique and profound sonnet that flows with brilliant lines and impeccable imagery that you’ve painted using nature .. I especially found this line to stand out, “ Diet: various birds, and small rodents, Scrub deserts, farm fields, rainforests, woodlands.“ songs of fauna well delivered and reality it is so profoundly you’ve articulated, pleasure reading this. Sending you light

Hilo Poet
Date: 12/19/2023 11:17:00 AM

Ah, thanks, Ink Empress. An added note of appreciation for the outlined spotlights. I need to rephrase so that the top line is not confused with the Red-tailed Hawk, which is not endangered, but in sync with the song of sonnets format that indicates strung sonnets will show the last line of the previous sonnet to appear as the first line of the succeeding sonnet, ugh. Aloha, William

Sotto Poet

Date: 12/19/2023 9:20:00 AM

William, your writing is truly exceptional. The vivid imagery and profound exploration of emotions and colors have left me in a state of awe. Your sonnet is a masterful display of literary craftsmanship.

Hilo Poet
Date: 12/19/2023 9:56:00 AM

Thanks, Lasaad, for your stalwart sharing words of encouragement. Aloha, William