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" THE TALE Of A YELLlOW PONCHO" - Something OLD (posted in 2020) Isn't it strange that many years ago, A dainty lass wearing a yellow poncho, twirled around in her garden like a golden butterfly... A young boy watched her frolic, and didn't forget the rest of his life! Years and years passed by! The garden lost its lustre! ravishing marigolds and seductive chrysanthemums flowered, radiant roses and hazel jinias blossomed, but the swing was vacant, no one heard the laughter, the chatter, the birds chirped there no longer! the yellow poncho was worn out, and withered away, something to get rid of, didn't look gorgeous any more to her, and finally that's what happened! faded poncho got replaced by a stylish attire! The memory did not pale away for someone else, who thought it was an enchanting angel he found in his dream, The angel didn't have wings to fly, but had a yellow cloak agleam! TEARDROPS (NEW POEM) The angel, engrossed in her hustling life, barely remembered the garden unsurpassed, flowers and butterflies, swing and laughter, the yellow Poncho - only a nostalgic past! middle of the night, she woke up some day, if she had a mysterious dream - she wondered! a quaint abode, cradled in an unruffled hamlet, serene with mehndi bushes bordered. pleasing breeze rustling through delicate window-coverings, made of Khus - a fragrant grass, brought a gentle aroma which she carried fluttering through life of hers! translucent teardrops fell…tiny luminous pearls... poignant memory of being apart, of a precious love, soft and tender ~ enveloped the damsel's forlorn heart. FIRST PLACE WRITTEN ON SEPTEMBER 30, 2021 For "Something Old, Something New" Poetry Contest Sponsor: John Lawless

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Date: 6/8/2022 7:41:00 PM
Wow! Reads like sequels blending into each other as memories are rekindled ~ congrats on your win, Mala
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Malabika Ray Choudhury
Date: 6/8/2022 8:16:00 PM
Thanks, Dear Friend. Yes, it’s almost a sequel! Really appreciate your inspiring words!
Date: 6/8/2022 9:09:00 AM
Congratulations on your win. A lovely write and pretty picture. Have a blessed day with your win as you write away.......................
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Date: 6/8/2022 9:46:00 AM
Thanks, Dear Paula, for letting me know the results. This is one of my favourite poems.
Date: 10/5/2021 6:58:00 AM
This is a beautiful poem with so much of feeling and a garden full of memories and flowers! Loved it!!
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Date: 10/5/2021 7:34:00 AM
Thanks, Krish. Both of us have tender memories of garden in our childhood.
Date: 10/4/2021 3:33:00 PM
I love both your "old" and "new" poems, Mala. Choosing one over the other would not be fair to either of them!! ~ Warm regards // paul
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Date: 10/5/2021 7:35:00 AM
Thank you, Paul. I am glad you enjoyed both the poems - how delightful from a talented poet! Really appreciate your inspiring comments.
Date: 10/4/2021 2:33:00 AM
You always manage to take this reader, deep within your poetry, yes i'm in a different world from the beginning to the end. Love it so much.
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Date: 10/5/2021 7:37:00 AM
Thank you, Harry. So delighted to know that my poem took you to a different world! Truly appreciate your inspiring words.
Date: 10/4/2021 12:56:00 AM
Yes,Mala I recognise that attachment to a piece of fav clothing
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Date: 10/5/2021 7:37:00 AM
Thanks, Brian. Truly appreciate your kind comment.
Date: 10/3/2021 3:15:00 PM
so cool, Mala. I think I actually like the new version even more. Good to see you in this contest.
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Date: 10/5/2021 7:39:00 AM
Thanks, Andrea. I am glad to know you enjoyed the new version. Love taking part in new challenges - get inspired!
Date: 10/3/2021 10:05:00 AM
Loved reading both the old and the new poem Mala... what connects both the poems is those "precious memories".... that never fade... be it fantasy or real... even in our lives.. we change a lot, our attire, our way of living, etc... but those old " sweet" memories safely stay in our heart... as fresh as ever... Best wishes and hugs my friend... ~ Ani
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Malabika Ray Choudhury
Date: 10/3/2021 11:09:00 AM
Thanks so much, Ani! This poem is both fantasy and real - hoping it will create different feelings in different people! Truly appreciate your sweetest comments. So inspiring!
Date: 10/2/2021 2:16:00 AM
Such contrasting poems. Part one is sad. I love gardens. Part two speaks volumes on feelings. Best for a win.
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Date: 10/3/2021 6:28:00 AM
Dear Victor, thank you so much for visiting my page. Truly appreciate your kind, inspiring comments.
Date: 10/1/2021 6:10:00 PM
Ah, such a tender story of love and admiration, I love the idea of the yellow poncho, its all in the eyes of the beholder, isn't it Mala, I love it, your such a creative spirit, too beautiful for words, :)
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Date: 10/3/2021 6:26:00 AM
Thank you so much, Dear Rose. Truly appreciate your loveliest comment.
Date: 9/30/2021 3:38:00 PM
Beautifully done. I love it... I like the first poem the best, though :) Reads like a sweet caress. I love them both but the first one lingers ... God bless you with a win. Love, Gina
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Date: 9/30/2021 4:33:00 PM
Thank you so much, Gina. The first one is my favourite too! Good to know your opinion - means a lot! Love ~ Mala
Date: 9/30/2021 3:29:00 PM
A great morning treat! “A Tale of A Yellow Poncho” has been my favourite ever. Re- reading this makes my heart smile. And this “Teardrops”emits same brilliance to me. Best wishes..
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Malabika Ray Choudhury
Date: 9/30/2021 4:31:00 PM
Thank you so much. This is my favourite too. I participated in this contest because I wanted to remake this fantasy poem.
Date: 9/30/2021 11:53:00 AM
Hello Mala, Oh she was an angel with the yellow cloak. that boy will miss her. she turned into a butterfly? Wow! Love & Friendship. Yet she remembers her love.
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Darlene De Beaulieu
Date: 10/1/2021 10:35:00 AM
Hello Mala, I interpret it as a fantasy. A beautiful fatasy. Love & Friendship, Darlene.
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Malabika Ray Choudhury
Date: 9/30/2021 4:29:00 PM
Darlene, sounds like you liked the poem. To me, it's almost a fantasy - you can interpret whatever way like. Thank you so much.

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