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The girl drops the river; woman bobs up; aqua's flatline on top basement blue, then it all, violet doom, as temperatue drops off the girl— aqua flatline, sleezy sleet, water glasses on her nose, scrub— I'm touching up, up, up. down that river before— beyond swim's flight; it runs for the sky— in someone's dead frame, unseeable bank— the woman passes out, dry.

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Date: 8/3/2024 12:49:00 AM
There is great imagery in this poem and also a hint of mystery.
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Date: 7/31/2024 7:03:00 AM
Your words stream like an endless river, flowing with such descriptive words. Very interesting and intriguing sweet paige, perhaps you were observing something and wrote this? Well delivered, pleasure reading your work always
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Date: 7/31/2024 6:56:00 AM
Hmm interesting, I think this has something to do with alcohol. Well done. Like a mystery until the end gives us a clue.
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Date: 7/30/2024 6:39:00 PM
So unique. It reminded me a bit like blitz poem or stream of consciousness.
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Date: 7/30/2024 1:52:00 PM
Nicely done Paige.. I liked your formatting..
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Date: 7/30/2024 11:37:00 AM
Very unique, Paige. Love your subtle use of color in metaphor! If this is for a contest, best wishes. Blessings to you.
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