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Red Penance

Under the shade of that proliferous maple tree we'd named I'd given you a piece of my naive exuberant heart when I handed over a fragment of shimmering red ribbon I still remember your reluctant smile masking paranoia In shades of twilight wavering from mauve to scarlet you'd returned that piece of me when you left imprudent to believe in the eternity of young love I'd vowed to reparate my life to obliviate my scars Discarded that wretched fragment of red ribbon I'd embarked a journey on a turn to another road the miserable ribbon unaware of my reverberating battles remained desolate on that spot- my incompetent sword A whiplash of raging storm washed it down the cliff as I kept descending into your miserable memories the fervent stream rolled it forth with the pebbles As I tossed my desires beneath the pattering raindrops It crashed against unrelenting waves and surged carelessly while I wished my fears would escape like an Albatross On a frozen blue midnight it swept along a canopy to the shore while the frozen chunks of my innocence gasped under snow When Autumn bade farewell, it swooshed along with broken twigs as my visions of you began to dissolve into old debts across time When it slept beneath the cushions of dried leaves in summer my fears evanesced in my pleas of mercy for atonement of new journeys It disappeared in the follies of my young years embraced by time and I rose into the skies with the strength of my scars Soothing whispers and wailing sobs found an abode together my exile demanded a resurrection of my past to attain salvation Last year I heard a hurricane had uprooted our dear maple tree I retreated the half mile I'd traversed half a decade ago with you Unshackled from your anchor, my ship sailed smoothly till our spot a fragment of a faded red ribbon fell next to a rising maple sapling Enchanted by the divine coincidence manifested from my journey I buried it with a soothing effervescence releasing you at last the sapling of my red penance revived me with hope and bliss I only remember the red memories now, not how the moments made me feel. May 24, 2020 Falling Poetry Contest Sponsor: Kai Michael Neumann ~Premiere Contest Winner: 6th Place Your Best Free Verse That You Wrote Poetry Contest Sponsor: Chantelle Anne Cooke ~Premiere Contest Winner: 6th Place BRIAN'S CHOICE T,any form,any theme ~Winner: 2nd Place

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Date: 6/21/2020 7:14:00 PM
Aditi, your poem is an emotionally vivid metaphoric beauty, breathtaking in its intensity and artistry. I loved every lush poetic line that flowed from your golden pen. A fav! Congratulations on your awesome win in Chantelle's contest. Warmest wishes.. ~Susan
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Aditi Mishra
Date: 6/22/2020 10:00:00 AM
It is an honor that you love my words Susan. Thank you for your generous words of appreciation and kind wishes. God bless you. Much love :)
Date: 6/19/2020 2:09:00 PM
Back to wish you heartfelt congratulations for this epic free verse, Aditi. Your awesome poetic gifts are on full display in this winning write. Many blessings, my dear friend ~ John
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Date: 6/20/2020 12:24:00 PM
Glad you love it dear friend. Thank you for such gracious words of appreciation and encouragement. God bless you. Have a great day :)
Date: 6/19/2020 1:55:00 PM
As always you amaze with your imagery and the unusual way you capture the emotions you express. Congrats on your wonderful win, Aditi.
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Date: 6/20/2020 12:23:00 PM
Andrea I am so glad you love my words. It is an honor for me. Thank for your constant support and encouragement. Blessings and love :)
Date: 6/5/2020 4:40:00 AM
Aditi, your healing journey was an expression of growth only the wisdom of time may provide. You have expressed your thoughts with such passion and determination I felt empathy well up inside me. "Soothing whispers and wailing sobs found an abode together"...Wow! What a wonderful poet you are! Congratulations on your deserving win! Blessings xxoo
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Date: 6/5/2020 6:19:00 AM
It is an honour that my words made you feel the emotions with such depth. Always blessed by your lovely appreciation Connie. Thank you for your constant encouragement. God bless you :)
Date: 6/1/2020 8:53:00 AM
Aditi, you have penned a vividly descriptive, deeply emotional, lovely poem. CONGRATS on your win. Janice
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Date: 6/1/2020 11:33:00 AM
Thank you so much Janice for your generous appreciation. Glad you loved them :)
Date: 6/1/2020 5:50:00 AM
That is a wonderful memory and so beautifully expressed. Kind wishes, Kai
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Date: 6/1/2020 6:01:00 AM
Glad you loved it. Thank you for your appreciation and for my placement in your contest Kai :)
Date: 5/25/2020 10:52:00 PM
This evocative poem takes the reader on quite a journey, through the four seasons of emotional ups and downs, and coming to rest in a place of acceptance and forgiveness. This was deeply moving, Aditi. You have a real talent for telling allegories of the human condition, and I love how you so often end with hope and contentment. This inspires one to do the same with their disappointments in life. Beautiful ~ John
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Aditi Mishra
Date: 5/26/2020 9:33:00 AM
I am blessed by your kind words of appreciation dear friend. Yes my poems usually end on a hopeful note, no matter how dark. I am glad you love them. Thank you for inspiring me to write more each day. God bless you John :)
Date: 5/25/2020 3:37:00 PM
deeply profound! You draw beautiful pictures with words!
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Date: 5/25/2020 3:41:00 PM
Glad you loved it. Thank you so much for your kind words of appreciation Malabika :)
Date: 5/25/2020 2:50:00 PM
I like this film I just poem watched Sure to go many more times You gorgeously Poetic!!!
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Date: 5/25/2020 2:57:00 PM
I am glad you loved it that much Gideon! Thank you for your kind words of appreciation my friend :)
Date: 5/25/2020 3:38:00 AM
Wow.. Simply wow..A fragment of a faded red ribbon fell next to a rising maple sapling..I felt magic in your ink.. Great write.. Good luck Aditi..
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Date: 5/25/2020 2:43:00 PM
I am always grateful for the encouragement your provide by your gracious words Jenish. Thank you! :)
Date: 5/24/2020 6:50:00 PM
This poem is deep and profoundly beautiful Aditi. This is sure to do well in the contest! xxoo
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Date: 5/25/2020 2:42:00 PM
I am happy you loved my words. Thank you so much for your kind words of appreciation Connie :)
Date: 5/24/2020 3:34:00 PM
Lovely write! Such a intense and interesting read. I enjoyed it and wish you all the best in the contest. God bless you with much love and joy, Gina
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Date: 5/25/2020 2:41:00 PM
Glad you enjoyed my words. Thank you so much Regina for encouraging me with your love and blessings :) God bless you

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