Pop

POP POP! Quiet But steady Everywhere Little explosions All too quick for the eye Blue sky looking down smiling Now there is a sudden hurry So sudden in one’s awarenesses And I want to shout “Oh thank God it’s spring!”

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James Foulk

Date: 5/16/2011 4:59:00 PM

very creative piece to write about spring, really enjoyed it.

Poet Destroyer A

Date: 5/13/2011 7:26:00 PM

Daver, howdy,, now this poem ,, i can smile and say.. no,, no,, cause here in Texas spring means.. summer. lol..& Autumn means summer... ans summer means "move to another state." we actually have hot days in 3 seasons of the year & I think our winters are like the springs up there where your at. Today we had 95 degree weather. It was terrible, but either than that.. I'm glad U guys who had so much snow, can enjoy the beauty of spring.. and "pop" goes what winter left behind.. enjoyed,.p.d.

Michelle Mac Donald

Date: 5/9/2011 9:47:00 AM

A wonderful presentation, Daver...starting with that "POP" that heralds the start of Spring. Such a clever and fitting form, by clever you! Thank you for the comment, I'm flattered...honestly. I listened to both pieces...they are more lovely than that write. You've a kind and generous soul! Wishing you and yours the best!! Mikki

James Peranteau

Date: 5/9/2011 4:17:00 AM

A beautiful approach dear poet, to spring ! And O how wonderful your addition to the writes on spring from all the Soupers lately ! Have a wonderful week sir ! ....much love, james

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 5/8/2011 10:07:00 PM

And it all turns into "popcorn popping on the apricot tree!!" (that's a line from a primary song in our church to describe blossoming of a tree). COOL one, Daver.

Wilma Neels

Date: 5/8/2011 1:40:00 PM

Your joy at witnessing spring is quite tangible Daver, lovely Etheree :) love Wilma

Kash Poet

Date: 5/8/2011 11:18:00 AM

This is lovely .....

Carolyn Devonshire

Date: 5/8/2011 10:19:00 AM

The explosions of color in spring's flowers always fill me with awe, Daver. Really like the form you chose for your poem as well. Excellent meter and perfectly delightful to read! Love you, Carolyn

Linda-Marie Sweetheart

Date: 5/8/2011 7:17:00 AM

Shouting right along with u Daver and pop is a great expressions as all the flowers blooming and trees waving hello... yes I am a Mom.. five sons.. one in Heaven now ..died at 5 months old from respiratory illness .. a little fighter was my J.J. thankxx for your sweet warm and always welcome comments my friend..luv..

Michael J. Falotico

Date: 5/8/2011 7:09:00 AM

Very nice write in a perfet form...