Patch Work

The bane facade 
of that vermin

Over 
and over
his piercing eye
measured her
by inch

Oh how captivated
she was
until;

mine taught hand caused
his
final blind
Copyright © | Year Posted 2010

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Dietrich Avatar
December 11, 2010 at 5:51 PM
James, let me try to explain triolet for you in a soupmail!
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December 10, 2010 at 6:48 PM
methinks this vermin be of the human kind! Do you mean that you made him go blind? I like that! Luv,Andrea
Sweetheart Avatar
December 9, 2010 at 7:54 AM
Great James.. try to contact them pronto .. they take some time a while to get back luv..
Austin Avatar
December 9, 2010 at 7:31 AM
Am I to understand, Sir James, that you biffed said vermin? SOCKO! Please inform me if I have misread this gem. Love, Dave
Peranteau Avatar
February 18, 2015 at 11:32 AM
No, you did not mis-read this write fine sir.much love, james
Sweetheart Avatar
December 9, 2010 at 6:53 AM
Well James u certainly have a flare for words that catch the readers attention my friend.. sorry but your poem is registering GROOK again..so u might want to notify TPS via Soup Mail on Home Page to look into why it is doing this luv.. enjoyed...
Kendrick Avatar
December 9, 2010 at 6:49 AM
Interesting work..After reading it a number of times, I finally got the gist..Thanks for stopping by and commenting on my work.Sara
Onclaud Avatar
December 9, 2010 at 6:18 AM
a grook master you are, james! i am awed by the element of surprise here---very innovative and creative.. thanks for passing by mt page; much enjoyed! warmest, nette
Bloomsfield Avatar
December 8, 2010 at 11:15 PM
i'm reading it in 'grook' form,once more. .lol
Peranteau Avatar
February 18, 2015 at 11:33 AM
I have no idea why this is grook....it is free verse TY LOve ya !
Neels Avatar
December 8, 2010 at 7:56 PM
James to the rescue ;) clever piece, love Wilma
Goff Avatar
December 8, 2010 at 6:52 PM
am smiling! James! Carolyn nailed the correct comment! great, imaginative poetry! jimbo
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December 8, 2010 at 6:36 PM
Always the defender of the ladies, James! That's just one of the reasons we love you so. I like the "Sir Gallahad" image of you in this poem; it's how I picture you. Love always, Carolyn
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December 8, 2010 at 10:22 AM
Once you told me your deceased mum loved patchwork,had this thought when i read the title. .The poem whispers with blind affection . .sweet. .sweet. .i love it!
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December 8, 2010 at 8:44 AM
A form of poetry I have not tried. Enjoyed your poem this morning. I want to wish you and your family a very Merry Christmas . God Bless Phyl
Brown Avatar
December 8, 2010 at 8:40 AM
I am reading some very amazing and diverse poetry this morning. I am glad yours was among the poetry I was able to read today. Thank you for sharing your writing with us James. Wishing you and yours a wonderful Holiday Season. Love,Carol
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