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Passion Fruit

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Waves of salty cream Foaming passion on your lips Effervescent sea

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Maria Williams

Date: 3/16/2017 11:21:00 PM

A cleverly crafted three lines where you've touched on the 'salt" in the fruit rather then the 'sweet', bringing out the realism that not there is a different side to the fruit. I love it

Darren White
Date: 3/16/2017 11:40:00 PM

Yes, it is absolutely metaphorical, thank you :)

Sara Ella

Date: 3/16/2017 9:40:00 PM

Senryu that is so sensual <3 Love it!

Darren White
Date: 3/16/2017 11:40:00 PM

Hah, Sara, no coffee today, but Passion Fruit ;)

Anne-Marie Coreggia

Date: 3/16/2017 7:43:00 AM

Darren this is irresistibly evocative. Loved it:) Amitiés

Darren White
Date: 3/16/2017 11:39:00 PM

Anne-Marie, thank you :)

Lisa Ricci

Date: 3/15/2017 1:18:00 PM

Hi Darren. How marvelous a thought and what beautiful poetry in true senryu form in count voice and tone. This is lovely. Well done entirely. Hope your day is going well.

Darren White
Date: 3/15/2017 1:44:00 PM

Thank you so much Lisa, I loved writing this little sensual Senryu :)

Jan Allison

Date: 3/15/2017 12:34:00 PM

Fabulous:-) hugs Jan xx

Darren White
Date: 3/15/2017 12:53:00 PM

Thanks Jan :D hugs!

Tim Smith

Date: 3/15/2017 11:00:00 AM

mouthwatering

Darren White
Date: 3/15/2017 11:10:00 AM

:D See you again soon. Back as soon as possible