Paper Doll

Once upon a time There was a little paper doll She lived in a paper house Made of paper walls She had a paper mom She had a paper dad And a little paper basset hound All wrinkled up and sad This little paper doll Went to a paper school Full of paper students Who thought that they were cool They made fun of the paper doll For her paper clothes For the way she styled her paper hair And for her too-small paper nose Once upon a time She decided to end it all So she grabbed a paper rope And walked down the hall She got to her paper closet And pushed the clothes aside She grabbed a little paper pen And wrote a note goodbye She was gone for good Before she even spoke She was a little paper doll And all the strings inside her broke

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Carrie Richards

Date: 11/3/2016 3:33:00 PM

Dear Avery, this poem speaks to so many others who have felt this way. You wrote from the heart, and it shows how much talent you have. You have helped someone you may never know, just by sharing these feelings. But please always value yourself, stay true to yourself, and be proud of who you are.Those who ridicule others, are making up for their own shortcomings. If you are able to share your feelings, you are helping make the world a better place. You are an inspiration and we need your light to shine :)

Tim Smith

Date: 11/3/2016 3:21:00 PM

A very powerful poem Avery. It is okay to be you. Thank you for sharing your gift of words. I have been inspired by you. Tim

Becca Teagan

Date: 11/3/2016 8:52:00 AM

Avery, this is an awesome write, it flows so well and uses great imagery, you are very talented! It's very sad to think of anyone feeling that they don't want to live anymore because of what others think about the way they dress or fix their hair. We are all unique individuals, and Avery you can be proud of who you are and not let any one's opinion affect you. You're a beautiful soul. As BW says below, write your pain. Keep writing, dear.

Constance La France

Date: 11/3/2016 8:45:00 AM

Avery, you have a talent for writing, you are very skillful in bringing the reader into your sadness, I feel this poem is coming from a life experience you are dealing with, I was a bullied girl, I was different, never fit it, but now I know that I am "unique" and have left all my paper people far behind, for I am a writer and you are too, my grandma used to tell me, "write your pain, write it" and that is what I did and that is what you need to always do ~

Daniel Turner

Date: 11/3/2016 8:09:00 AM

This is so sad, Avery, you are so young and so are your immature classmates. There is nothing wrong with you. Some people are just mean people. You are a beautiful girl and you have your whole life ahead of you. I can tell simply by reading this poem you have talent. Perhaps one day you'll write a best selling novel or book of poems. just think about it.