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A fairytale or not contest ** Sponsor: Fire Bird  ** January 16, 2024

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I'm on the outside, looking In Quite often I feel like the only word in a poem that doesn't rhyme, or I'm a nickle, five cents short when I'm in need of a dime. You make me feel like I don't belong. Distress is written all over my face. I'm the only wallflower at a dance. The shy one in need of a hiding place. I don't want to be the odd puzzle piece that everyone overlooks and rejects. I have a heart that's been wounded. Your ostracism has crippling affects.

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Date: 1/22/2024 10:08:00 PM
"I have a heart that's been wounded" - feeling pain as part of the tale. Beautifully written. Congratulations!
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Date: 1/22/2024 12:16:00 PM
Congratulations on your win. WOW!!! What a powerful story/write. Love It... Many have felt this way at one time or another. Have a blessed day/week..................
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Date: 1/22/2024 12:20:00 PM
Thank you, Paula. You’re always so kind and giving with your plaudits.
Date: 1/16/2024 4:18:00 PM
ohhh...I can identify with the feelings you conveyed so rhythmically in your poem. I think we're all wounded to some degree or another. Some days I feel more vulnerable from the wounds than I do on other days...not sure why...but rejection and ostracism does impact me...another poem filled with insight and authenticity. A fav! hugs, Sara
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Date: 1/22/2024 12:19:00 PM
We get moody and there are times when we can’t explain why. But we don’t have to give an explanation. I’ve been told I’m too sensitive but I’d rather feel those emotions then not care. Thanks for understanding, Sara.
Date: 1/16/2024 9:54:00 AM
Nice songlike poem.
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Date: 1/16/2024 2:25:00 PM
Thanks, as always for your support, Jay.

Book: Shattered Sighs