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Obsidian Mosque

I'm fading away to oblivion Fates lead me to having a heart made of obsidian Shatters easily but cuts deep I'm feeling so weak, I can't believe it's been weeks Since we last had the chance to see Each other, its tearing me apart You're about to be my baby mother, and I don't know where you are We met after a year, sometime last summer Now we're apart, you've got a piece of me More than just my heart, I wish that I had you I get that the things I said made you mad boo But don't you miss what we had? Do you ever think of the past All of the good memories, because they outweigh the bad

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Silent One

Date: 12/15/2023 11:21:00 AM

I can feel the pain in your words and you are not the first man I know who has gone through this.. I wonder, why did you call it Obsidian mosque?

Jeremy Jenkins
Date: 12/15/2023 2:16:00 PM

Because it's a play on words, "Broken Faith" but rather than use the term faith I chose to use mosque just as i chose obsidian to interpret "broken"

Ink Empress

Date: 12/15/2023 7:18:00 AM

Soul hitting, sincere and very emotive write this is. I felt the emotions flowing throughout this: its sad when one is left pondering whether they mean nothing to the other, especially when so so much was shared. I love the opening lines in this the most and the ending. Pleasure reading this sad poem that many would feel

Jeremy Jenkins
Date: 12/15/2023 7:25:00 AM

Thank you for your comment, I wrote this during a time of hurt as you can tell and its odd to say but I am glad that in some sense you're able to sense the pain I had been feeling in that moment. I try to capture how I feel, or have felt when I write. Once again thank you :)