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Not Quite Noah's Ark - Elements Part 3 Water

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Noah heard the forecast and realised he must build an ark It had to be impermeable for when they finally disembark. They faced forty days and forty nights of torrential precipitation Thank goodness Noah was constructing the ark for this situation To invigorate Noah he could see the storm clouds were gathering He knew that they must work quickly or they would get a battering The requisite was it must be huge to hold animals and his family When animals boarded two by two, it was a spectacular sight to see When they reached dry land they were met with falling snow Snow is formed by crystallization in case you didn’t know! Water is essential to our daily life, we need it for our hydration It is sent to us from heaven above – thank God for precipitation! 04~04~16 N/A in original contest - submitted to Screwed XIII sponsored by Rob Carmack 1 original, poem on the theme of THE ELEMENT OF WATER! The only limitations for this contest is that you must include these 6 words in your poem: 1) HYDRATION (2) REQUISITE (3) PRECIPITATION (4) IMPERMEABLE (5) INVIGORATE (6) CRYSTALLIZATION.

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Jean Murray

Date: 4/6/2016 8:36:00 PM

I'm smiling here Jan. Mine must have some from too much sun down here in Australia. I am more used to constant rain, like you.

Jan Allison
Date: 4/6/2016 8:41:00 PM

Send a bit of sunshine now Jean and bring back loads with you please:-) hugs Jan xx

Joseph May

Date: 4/5/2016 12:37:00 PM

Very nicely penned Jan...like how you used the ark as a theme...

Jan Allison
Date: 4/5/2016 12:46:00 PM

We have had rain for 3 days and my friend said we better start to build an ark - hence the creation of the poem - I wasn't going to enter the contest as I found the words so restrictive then voila here it is:-) hugs Jan xx

Karam Misra

Date: 4/5/2016 8:13:00 AM

I was scratching my head on how to use the words which seemed to be so dry and impossible to use in a poem. But here you go creating such a wonderful poem with such ease. Great, Jan, and all the best for the contest.

Jan Allison
Date: 4/5/2016 8:24:00 AM

Thanks Karam - I wasn't going to enter as I too found the words restricting but thankfully the British weather and a friend gave me inspiration lol:-) hugs jan xx

Maurice Rigoler

Date: 4/4/2016 3:53:00 PM

Good use of the required words, Jan. Like the theme of Noah and the flood, of which I've written my share. I'm at work (you're the first to know) on a biography of Noah, entitled "Forty days and nights of seasickness." As to the water of my poem, no, it wasn't Handel's Water Music. I was thinking more of a few pieces by Chopin and Schubert. / M

Jan Allison
Date: 4/4/2016 3:57:00 PM

OH Wow Maurice that project sounds fascinating and I love the title:-) hugs Jan xx

Laura Leiser

Date: 4/4/2016 3:35:00 PM

Great poem with the wonderful Noah and flood Bible story, as well as good use of the required words, Jan! Good luck in the contest :)

Jan Allison
Date: 4/4/2016 3:37:00 PM

Thanks Laura ... there is also a little poetic licence too lol:-) hugs Jan xx

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 4/4/2016 3:20:00 PM

wow, wish I had gotten inspiration like this to do this contest. This is SO hard for me, Jan. Taking a lighter route may be the answer!!! GREAT job

Jan Allison
Date: 4/4/2016 3:25:00 PM

Thanks Andrea:-) I wasn't going to enter the contest but got divine inspiration from the weather and a comment from a friend:-) hugs Jan xx

Meenakshi Raina

Date: 4/4/2016 2:30:00 PM

Nice write Jan...best use of those 6 words...all the best for the contest.

Jan Allison
Date: 4/4/2016 2:35:00 PM

Thanks Meenakshi it is quite a challenge and I am please with the finished poem:-) hugs Jan xx

Daniel Turner

Date: 4/4/2016 2:10:00 PM

Jan, where exactly did you see in the Bible they disembarked in snow? LOL This is really fun! Good luck. Peace and thanks for the smile:)

Jan Allison
Date: 4/4/2016 2:32:00 PM

:-) hugs Jan xx

Daniel Turner
Date: 4/4/2016 2:16:00 PM

That's Ok I like your story better. More colorful.

Jan Allison
Date: 4/4/2016 2:14:00 PM

Errrr .... I hold my hands up and confess I have used JUST a little poetic licence Daniel ... as the title says .. not quite Noah's ark lol:-) hugs Jan xx

Timothy Hicks

Date: 4/4/2016 12:44:00 PM

I see that I wasn't the only one that took a Biblical angle (LOT of water!) ... ha ha. Your "matter 'o fact" crystallization line was funny. But of course a lot of the stuff you write often makes me giggle, so it's no surprise .... you know, considering the tight space of thousands of different animals, this COULD have gone in a very different direction ... think of all that waste removal! LOL!

Jan Allison
Date: 4/4/2016 12:48:00 PM

Ha ha love your comment especially about the waste disposal - it is amazing but VERY occasionally I can write about subjects other than poop lol. I hope your poem will top the podium it is exceptional :-) hugs jan xx

Jack Horne

Date: 4/4/2016 12:16:00 PM

very clever write - enjoyed & have learnt a thing or two!!

Jan Allison
Date: 4/4/2016 12:20:00 PM

Thanks Jack :-) I wasn't going to enter the contest with the constraints of the 6 words - then inspiration hit after 3 days of solid rain and a comment from a friend lol:-)hugs Jan xx

Tim Smith

Date: 4/4/2016 10:27:00 AM

I had to laugh at the crystallization line...good one Jan

Jan Allison
Date: 4/4/2016 11:11:00 AM

I had to use a touch of humour Tim - you know me well lol:-) hugs Jan xx

Lenny Gazbowski

Date: 4/4/2016 9:03:00 AM

An excellently crafted piece of writing Jan, and good luck for the contest.

Jan Allison
Date: 4/4/2016 9:07:00 AM

Thanks Lenny - I wasn't going to enter the contest with the conrestraints of the 6 words.. but I got inspired and voila here is my poem I am so glad you enjoyed it:-) hugs Jan x