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Nightmares (Traditional Cinquain)

Nightmares Deep inset fears Heartbeat races forward Overwhelmed with anxious feeling Fearful

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Alana Tye

Date: 10/1/2008 6:44:00 AM

There are times I refuse to go to sleep after having certain nightmares. Too real they seem. Couldn't have explained this one better myself. Great write! :) Thanks for your comments. Cheers, Alana

Deneen White

Date: 9/30/2008 3:46:00 PM

nightmares can sometimes seem so real, so you feel anxious, glad that they are over sometimes, nice write, thanks for your comments, take care D-ncye

Ali Matheny

Date: 9/29/2008 3:47:00 PM

How do I get a blog??

Farah Chamma

Date: 9/29/2008 2:54:00 PM

Expressed beautifully...Nightmares and dreams in general are a whole thought provovation... TYOne, Farah

Michaela Payne

Date: 9/29/2008 8:37:00 AM

these aren't my favorite part of sleeping lol. so true about or nightmares, and your still anxious and afraid after you wake up, ~Michaela~

John Loving Iii

Date: 9/29/2008 6:38:00 AM

true true the scary feelings only from our dreams. jhl

Sami Al-Khalili

Date: 9/29/2008 1:59:00 AM

I liked it very much. This cinquain poem made me feel a rush as if somebody is following me constantly. So simple yet overflowing with meaning. Sami.

Brian Strand

Date: 9/28/2008 11:52:00 PM

Nice one Michael look forward to more of your cinquains.Capitilisation is okay in cinquains ,traditional or modern, as is punctuation etc It's a pretty fluid form .Rgds Brian. Yes I was in my teens in the fifties so the Saturday night dance was the 'thing ',but we danced together in those days,and jive was king.

George Anos

Date: 9/28/2008 9:46:00 PM

Nice cinquain here! I felt my heart beat fast for a while there hehe!

James Foulk

Date: 9/28/2008 8:22:00 PM

yes i have them sometimes a great piece of poetry. thank you Michael for reading so many of my poems and for your very kind comments, it is always a joy when you do comment on my poems your to kind and i do thank you.

Trudy Diane Rider

Date: 9/28/2008 7:01:00 PM

I still have those nightmares...but now they are mostly in my dreams...::grin::...Thanks Michael. Great poem! Tru

Constance La France

Date: 9/28/2008 6:36:00 PM

Michael.. thanks for your comments on my poem "I am truly blessed" this gift for me started in childhood but lay dormant until 1997 the day of my fathers death.. I wrote a poem, and I knew...I call it Dad's Work Shed, it is on this site.. I like this poem of yours.. yes nightmares are often fearsome. but sometimes a message we need to listen to..Constance

Carrie Richards

Date: 9/28/2008 5:21:00 PM

We all have them, ...I always try to analyze them...wondering where do they come from, and why? But some are harder than others to figure out. Hope you sleep well tonight, Michael! God Bless...Carrie

Laura Mckenzie

Date: 9/28/2008 4:07:00 PM

Michael Yes I can relate I had a wierd one last night. I think dreams are therapy for the mind to work out! Good one Laura :)

Joseph Spence Sr

Date: 9/28/2008 12:00:00 PM

Michael this is excellent. I like how you let the words flow. This reminds me of an athlete who has trained consistently hard to win and race and at the finishing line is really close to the person ahead by the split of a hair. I can feel the heart racing like a time clock. Great job! ~Joseph

Date: 9/28/2008 10:16:00 AM

Nice use of imagery and an interesting perspective for the reader to ponder. Just one thought--I belonged to a cinquain group and they generally don't believe in capitalizing the first letter of each line. Thank you for adding your creative thoughts to "Tidbits". I am so excited about how it is growing and coming together--a tribute to so many talented writers at The Soup. Karen

Michael Torres

Date: 9/28/2008 7:21:00 AM

Michael- Thankyou for your kind comments. These words were picked in perfect order. A correct sequence described leading to the right response in escalating torture. Very nice work.... God bless you Toni and Michaela .All my love for you and yours.

Sharon Winter

Date: 9/28/2008 6:33:00 AM

Oh yes, well said. I do wake up with my heart racing. The bad ones are hard to get rid of. Michael, your comments are so appreciated, and quite often simply make my day. Hope you know I feel the same about you. Love & hugs, Shar xoxo