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My Muddled Mind

I'm mystified by my unruly brain while grasping for a word, I draw a blank like ticker tape that moves in fits and starts elusive phrases flicker in and out and putting names with faces is a chore. To place someone is hard as calculus this mind, it calcifies as time goes by. Can anybody recommend a tool that scrapes away the crust of this decay? I'll trade this mind for one that's fresh and new but then I'd lose myself, I'll let things be and keep my mind, and never mind the mess it just takes time to get from "A to B". Written on 5/26/2016

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Kim Rodrigues

Date: 5/20/2017 5:41:00 PM

Back for congrats, Laura!

Laura Leiser
Date: 5/20/2017 6:40:00 PM

Thanks, Kim. :)

Darren White

Date: 5/20/2017 2:52:00 PM

Laura I love your wordplay in this poem. Congratulations!

Laura Leiser
Date: 5/20/2017 6:39:00 PM

Thanks, Darren :)

Janice Canerdy

Date: 5/20/2017 2:16:00 PM

Laura, your well-written poem--I especially like the last line!--probably describes MANY minds--mine, for sure! Congrats on your well-deserved win in my contest! Janice

Laura Leiser
Date: 5/20/2017 6:39:00 PM

Thank you, Janic, for my placement in your great contest! I'm very happy you liked my poem, as well. :)

Eve Roper

Date: 7/5/2016 9:37:00 PM

I love this poem reminds me of me and my husband we always hope the other will make the other remember. Hugs

Laura Leiser
Date: 7/5/2016 10:04:00 PM

Thanks, Eve :)

Dineen Williams Gault

Date: 6/4/2016 7:04:00 AM

That right on the tip of my tongue feeling, that unfortunately can increase with age. Loved the precise phrasing and metaphor here. Congratulations!

Laura Leiser
Date: 6/4/2016 9:15:00 AM

Thank you, Dineen. It was fun to write this one :)

Janice Canerdy

Date: 6/3/2016 3:44:00 PM

Really good! Congrats on your win, Laura. Janice

Laura Leiser
Date: 6/3/2016 7:21:00 PM

Thank you, Janice. I'm glad you liked it :)

Sandra Haight

Date: 6/3/2016 10:13:00 AM

Hi Laura, back to congratulate your on your fine placement in the contest! I knew it would do well when I first read it. Hugs, Sandra

Laura Leiser
Date: 6/3/2016 3:01:00 PM

Thank you for your kinds words, Sandra...I enjoyed this contest :)

Joanna Daniel

Date: 6/3/2016 3:49:00 AM

Congratulations on your placement in the contest, Laura:) I like the last four lines were a great way to conclude your poem:)

Laura Leiser
Date: 6/3/2016 8:20:00 AM

Thanks, Jo! I'm glad you enjoyed my poem, and thanks for commenting :)

John Lawless

Date: 6/2/2016 10:00:00 PM

Laura, that first line.....GOT ME...thinking...maybe she's got the answer. Seems that organizing the thoughts is sorta like herding cats. Thanks for entering the contest.

Laura Leiser
Date: 6/2/2016 10:35:00 PM

Thank you for placing my poem in your contest, John! It was my first time writing blank verse and I liked the form very much :)

John Watt

Date: 6/2/2016 12:18:00 AM

Laura, loved this one... so relatable. Enjoyed the line, "then I'd lose myself, I'll let things be / and keep my mind, and never mind the mess". Best wishes in the contest, dear friend!

Laura Leiser
Date: 6/2/2016 2:38:00 PM

Thank you, John! I've also enjoyed your friendship, as well as reading your awesome poetry :)

Balveen Cheema

Date: 5/31/2016 1:28:00 PM

Many sail in the same boat Laura!

Laura Leiser
Date: 5/31/2016 8:42:00 PM

Ha ha! Yes, that's true, Balveen :D

John Fleming

Date: 5/30/2016 12:50:00 PM

I think even the greatest minds amongst us suffer from, as you put it, a "Muddled Mind". I suppose that is what poetry is all about: Observations and experiences that evoke emotions and feelings that an individual is fully aware of...But finds so, so difficult to express in mere stated "Matter of Fact" and logical terms. Tis indeed a strange beastie is poetry, methinks. My very best regards, Laura...And my warmest wishes. :) john

Laura Leiser
Date: 5/30/2016 1:31:00 PM

Thanks, John, for your insightful comments. The mind is a mysterious thing...but In glad mine tends toward poetry!

Arthur Vaso

Date: 5/29/2016 12:01:00 AM

I so loved this! :)

Laura Leiser
Date: 5/29/2016 3:56:00 PM

Thanks, Arthur! My first time with blank verse, too, so why not talk about a blank mind?! :O

Kim Rodrigues

Date: 5/27/2016 5:16:00 PM

And the harder I try to come up with said word...the more elusive it becomes! Well wishes for the contest!

Laura Leiser
Date: 5/29/2016 3:54:00 PM

Thanks, Kim! At least poetry can help keep our words coming, even if it takes awhile, lol! :)

Frederic Parker

Date: 5/27/2016 1:45:00 PM

you've described my state of mind for every day I can remember, which is not many...

Laura Leiser
Date: 5/27/2016 5:07:00 PM

Ha! But...I don't believe it ;)

Sandra Haight

Date: 5/27/2016 11:47:00 AM

An excellent Blank verse poem, Laura. Love the enjambment that you used to make it read so smoothly. And the theme...well, I as one can certainly identify! Wonderfully done and best wishes for the contest! 7, Hugs, Sandra

Laura Leiser
Date: 5/27/2016 12:15:00 PM

Thanks, Sandra! This is my first attempt at blank verse, and maybe I did it okay, so I'm relieved! :O

Connie Marcum Wong

Date: 5/27/2016 5:29:00 AM

My children who used to have no problem with remembering now wait for me to chime in and we laugh! It happens to everyone, but age does play a factor in recall. I enjoyed this Laura! #7 ; )

Laura Leiser
Date: 5/27/2016 12:14:00 PM

Funny! The delay factor does kick in as we age, right? ;)

Jan Allison

Date: 5/27/2016 1:43:00 AM

I think its called getting older Laura - sure can relate to this one:-) hugs Jan xx

Laura Leiser
Date: 5/27/2016 12:10:00 PM

Yep, it comes to most of us, right? Thanks for stopping by, Jan :)