Laura Leiser Poet Blank verse

My Muddled Mind

I'm mystified by my unruly brain
while grasping for a word, I draw a blank
like ticker tape that moves in fits and starts
elusive phrases flicker in and out
and putting names with faces is a chore.
To place someone is hard as calculus
this mind, it calcifies as time goes by.
Can anybody recommend a tool
that scrapes away the crust of this decay?
I'll trade this mind for one that's fresh and new
but then I'd lose myself, I'll let things be
and keep my mind, and never mind the mess
it just takes time to get from "A to B".





Written on 5/26/2016

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Kim Rodrigues May 20, 2017 at 5:41 PM Back for congrats, Laura! Laura Leiser May 20, 2017 at 6:40 PM Thanks, Kim. :)

Darren White May 20, 2017 at 2:52 PM Laura I love your wordplay in this poem. Congratulations! Laura Leiser May 20, 2017 at 6:39 PM Thanks, Darren :)

Janice Canerdy May 20, 2017 at 2:16 PM Laura, your well-written poem--I especially like the last line!--probably describes MANY minds--mine, for sure! Congrats on your well-deserved win in my contest! Janice Laura Leiser May 20, 2017 at 6:39 PM Thank you, Janic, for my placement in your great contest! I'm very happy you liked my poem, as well. :)

Eve Roper July 5, 2016 at 9:37 PM I love this poem reminds me of me and my husband we always hope the other will make the other remember. Hugs Laura Leiser July 5, 2016 at 10:04 PM Thanks, Eve :)

Dineen Williams Gault June 4, 2016 at 7:04 AM That right on the tip of my tongue feeling, that unfortunately can increase with age. Loved the precise phrasing and metaphor here. Congratulations! Laura Leiser June 4, 2016 at 9:15 AM Thank you, Dineen. It was fun to write this one :)

Janice Canerdy June 3, 2016 at 3:44 PM Really good! Congrats on your win, Laura. Janice Laura Leiser June 3, 2016 at 7:21 PM Thank you, Janice. I'm glad you liked it :)

Sandra Haight June 3, 2016 at 10:13 AM Hi Laura, back to congratulate your on your fine placement in the contest! I knew it would do well when I first read it. Hugs, Sandra Laura Leiser June 3, 2016 at 3:01 PM Thank you for your kinds words, Sandra...I enjoyed this contest :)

Joanna Daniel June 3, 2016 at 3:49 AM Congratulations on your placement in the contest, Laura:) I like the last four lines were a great way to conclude your poem:) Laura Leiser June 3, 2016 at 8:20 AM Thanks, Jo! I'm glad you enjoyed my poem, and thanks for commenting :)

John Lawless June 2, 2016 at 10:00 PM Laura, that first line.....GOT ME...thinking...maybe she's got the answer. Seems that organizing the thoughts is sorta like herding cats. Thanks for entering the contest. Laura Leiser June 2, 2016 at 10:35 PM Thank you for placing my poem in your contest, John! It was my first time writing blank verse and I liked the form very much :)

John Watt June 2, 2016 at 12:18 AM Laura, loved this one... so relatable. Enjoyed the line, "then I'd lose myself, I'll let things be / and keep my mind, and never mind the mess". Best wishes in the contest, dear friend! Laura Leiser June 2, 2016 at 2:38 PM Thank you, John! I've also enjoyed your friendship, as well as reading your awesome poetry :)

Balveen Cheema May 31, 2016 at 1:28 PM Many sail in the same boat Laura! Laura Leiser May 31, 2016 at 8:42 PM Ha ha! Yes, that's true, Balveen :D

John Fleming May 30, 2016 at 12:50 PM I think even the greatest minds amongst us suffer from, as you put it, a "Muddled Mind". I suppose that is what poetry is all about: Observations and experiences that evoke emotions and feelings that an individual is fully aware of...But finds so, so difficult to express in mere stated "Matter of Fact" and logical terms. Tis indeed a strange beastie is poetry, methinks. My very best regards, Laura...And my warmest wishes. :) john Laura Leiser May 30, 2016 at 1:31 PM Thanks, John, for your insightful comments. The mind is a mysterious thing...but In glad mine tends toward poetry!

Arthur Vaso May 29, 2016 at 12:01 AM I so loved this! :) Laura Leiser May 29, 2016 at 3:56 PM Thanks, Arthur! My first time with blank verse, too, so why not talk about a blank mind?! :O

Kim Rodrigues May 27, 2016 at 5:16 PM And the harder I try to come up with said word...the more elusive it becomes! Well wishes for the contest! Laura Leiser May 29, 2016 at 3:54 PM Thanks, Kim! At least poetry can help keep our words coming, even if it takes awhile, lol! :)

Frederic Parker May 27, 2016 at 1:45 PM you've described my state of mind for every day I can remember, which is not many... Laura Leiser May 27, 2016 at 5:07 PM Ha! But...I don't believe it ;)

Sandra Haight May 27, 2016 at 11:47 AM An excellent Blank verse poem, Laura. Love the enjambment that you used to make it read so smoothly. And the theme...well, I as one can certainly identify! Wonderfully done and best wishes for the contest! 7, Hugs, Sandra Laura Leiser May 27, 2016 at 12:15 PM Thanks, Sandra! This is my first attempt at blank verse, and maybe I did it okay, so I'm relieved! :O

Connie Marcum Wong May 27, 2016 at 5:29 AM My children who used to have no problem with remembering now wait for me to chime in and we laugh! It happens to everyone, but age does play a factor in recall. I enjoyed this Laura! #7 ; ) Laura Leiser May 27, 2016 at 12:14 PM Funny! The delay factor does kick in as we age, right? ;)

Jan Allison May 27, 2016 at 1:43 AM I think its called getting older Laura - sure can relate to this one:-) hugs Jan xx Laura Leiser May 27, 2016 at 12:10 PM Yep, it comes to most of us, right? Thanks for stopping by, Jan :)