Mother Said

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Entry for the MOTHER SAID with Refractory Rhymes Poetry Contest: Sponsored by: Suzette Richards

“You’ll live,” my mother prompts; above my screams, which pierced the air with strident oomph; she, bandaging my wounds. It happened as I traipsed the woods; I fell amongst a pile of jagged rocks whilst reaching for a gem, just glimpsed. It was my birthday, eighth; or maybe it was ninth, and I had always dreamt to find a gem so scarce. “Now look, your pants are spoilt,” she said, without much warmth. I knew she wasn’t angry, just a little anxious. New pants, with money scarce was for her a problem; sewing machine - zigzag soon, the hole was nothing!

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thriveni c mysore

Date: 9/16/2024 3:19:00 AM

dear poet, sometimes a mother disguises her real fear by dismissing it with something silly. she did miss a beat when the child fell but dispelled her anxiety to soiled clothes. what an observation! When I fell at about the same age, my mom banged me more screaming 'why did you fall' I was bruised more by her beating, now through your poem I can feel her pain. Thank you so much for this wonderful poem, took me back by 5 decades. congratulations on your win.

Terry Miller
Date: 11/19/2024 2:54:00 AM

Thank you so much for your kind comments

Sara Kendrick

Date: 9/15/2024 4:58:00 AM

Mothers can be resourceful when it comes to making life better for their children. I enjoyed reading your winner. Way to go. Congratulations. Sara K

Terry Miller
Date: 9/15/2024 7:37:00 AM

Thank you Sara

Suzette Richards

Date: 9/15/2024 12:58:00 AM

Congratulations on your 3rd place win, Terry, with this tale that I think many can relate to. Thank you for sharing it with us. Regards, Suzette

Terry Miller
Date: 9/15/2024 7:38:00 AM

Thank you so much, for the placement, and for running such an interesting contest, I enjoyed writing for it.

Gershon Wolf

Date: 8/22/2024 7:02:00 PM

And there you were, Terry, trying to ease the financial burden of your mother, 'reaching for a gem!' What a find son! Smiles, Gershon

Terry Miller
Date: 8/23/2024 12:52:00 AM

Thank you Gershon