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Entry for the MOTHER SAID with Refractory Rhymes Poetry Contest: Sponsored by: Suzette Richards 

Mother Said

“You’ll live,” my mother prompts;
above my screams, which pierced
the air with strident oomph;
she, bandaging my wounds.

It happened as I traipsed
the woods; I fell amongst
a pile of jagged rocks whilst
reaching for a gem, just glimpsed.

It was my birthday, eighth;
or maybe it was ninth,
and I had always dreamt
to find a gem so scarce.

“Now look, your pants are spoilt,”
she said, without much warmth.
I knew she wasn’t angry,
just a little anxious.

New pants, with money scarce
was for her a problem;
sewing machine - zigzag
soon, the hole was nothing!
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mysore Avatar
September 16, 2024 at 3:19 AM
dear poet, sometimes a mother disguises her real fear by dismissing it with something silly. she did miss a beat when the child fell but dispelled her anxiety to soiled clothes. what an observation! When I fell at about the same age, my mom banged me more screaming 'why did you fall' I was bruised more by her beating, now through your poem I can feel her pain. Thank you so much for this wonderful poem, took me back by 5 decades. congratulations on your win.
Miller Avatar
November 19, 2024 at 2:54 AM
Thank you so much for your kind comments
Kendrick Avatar
September 15, 2024 at 4:58 AM
Mothers can be resourceful when it comes to making life better for their children. I enjoyed reading your winner. Way to go. Congratulations. Sara K
Miller Avatar
September 15, 2024 at 7:37 AM
Thank you Sara
Richards Avatar
September 15, 2024 at 12:58 AM
Congratulations on your 3rd place win, Terry, with this tale that I think many can relate to. Thank you for sharing it with us. Regards, Suzette
Miller Avatar
September 15, 2024 at 7:38 AM
Thank you so much, for the placement, and for running such an interesting contest, I enjoyed writing for it.
Wolf Avatar
August 22, 2024 at 7:02 PM
And there you were, Terry, trying to ease the financial burden of your mother, 'reaching for a gem!' What a find son! Smiles, Gershon
Miller Avatar
August 23, 2024 at 12:52 AM
Thank you Gershon
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