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Maturing: the Adult Contest

Time seemed to be in abundance; enough to chew and brew Sleep, play or gossip; enough to spare despite all that we blew Dreams, expectations, full of flurry; no tick to stir the blurry Life discarded as wasteful worry; hurry, worry all went to bury I the Master, I the Supreme; others, the ordinary got little attention Times came and crept by slowly; learning shirked away at mention Who cares, motto was straight; something will happen, why haste We will surely learn as we grow; grew we sure, but in utter waste Overtime, the uncared suddenly became important; time was short With hunched shoulders I prayed for mercy; hoping for His support Help! I shouted, but they laughed; I got no solace, calm or sleep Fear, unknown, induced a maddening; my end seemed so cheap Mercy, somehow was restored; zero, the ordinary I learned to ask for Time, the industry & thrift; I learnt to strive for, not ignore anymore. (This poem is a modified (couplet) version of an old poem titled 'Transcendence' which was in Free Verse form.)

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Date: 4/26/2015 8:21:00 AM
Mohan, your modified couplet reads wonderfully, it is so true in youth we waste our precious time, we thing we have forever and one day we realize, you have captured this well 7, and thanks for visiting my poem, love hurts, yes life is full of sad lessons
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Date: 4/25/2015 7:38:00 PM
It's as if the speaker was jerked suddenly from his carefree lifestyle to mature out of necessity. He became an adult overnight, learned the hard way. I like the honesty, quite edgy. Is this for the contest? You need to put For Adult Contest on the title. All the best, Mohan! Kim :)
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Mohan Chutani
Date: 4/25/2015 11:26:00 PM
Kim, thanx. I made suitable changes. realisation can come gradually or all of a sudden depending on a situation. Mohan
Book: Shattered Sighs