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Love On the Planet Evon -Revised

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The night descends quickly. The bloody Evon’s moon rise to its zenith leaving a red uneven path on the choppy ocean surface. Quickly I take my special pill that will transform my legs into a tail. Patiently I wait for her, tail splashing, laughter ringing over the glassy sea, my mermaid riding gracefully over crested milky waves. All lovers are asleep or hiding to escape their fears that change in the deadly night might bring. Not me. Ah, she arrives and I’m in bliss. We revel in the crimson Evon light, surf giant white-tipped waves, dive into the dark waters below. We swim together, bathing off our cares, the great Evon gives us strength. The sea songbirds soar o'er our heads, thrill us with their lovely lullaby. The waves pound the spiky crags adding their haunting symphony. Then will my love sing her haunting ditty, As I go into a rapture of unbound passion. I love the sea, the salty sea, Painted red with Evon's moon, far from the clutches of the mighty sun that burns and blotches my skin. Let me glide down towards the seabed below the inky surface and mingle with fish and mollusks and mermaids, especially the one I truly love. This is perpetual bliss, paradise touched To look over towards the far horizon, isn't that our wishing star shooting across the inky skies?

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Date: 9/22/2022 7:26:00 AM
How lovely your dreams, imaginings, or are they real…after all! Dream on, sweet friend Victor! We dream with you!
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Date: 9/21/2022 7:11:00 AM
Lovely ocean images...Delice
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Date: 9/20/2022 3:45:00 PM
Remarkable poetry, Victor! I discovered you only when you commented on one of mine so now I have to catch up. Lucky me! Elizabeth
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Date: 9/19/2022 9:28:00 AM
An interesting love story told in poetic form. Thanks for sharing and for dropping by my page. I do enjoy chocolate and I do eat chocolate. I don't have xocolatophobia as of this moment. Sara
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Date: 9/19/2022 8:37:00 AM
An awesome fishy tale of love in the sea between a mermaid and merman, very creative, great imagination Victor… Belle
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Date: 9/19/2022 7:28:00 AM
Another romantic beauty Victor…a wonderful tale….your imagination has no bounds! A beautiful poem I enjoyed reAding my friend! Debx
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Date: 9/18/2022 9:32:00 PM
My, my! On land, in sea, love oozes. You’ve left out the air element, perhaps a romantic sequel awaits?
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Date: 9/18/2022 1:32:00 PM
- Really enjoying this beautiful poem...everything came so alive...skillfully described, my friend Victor :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :)
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Date: 9/18/2022 9:36:00 AM
This story is as magical as a fairytale, Victor. Imaginative and fun to read. :)
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Date: 9/18/2022 8:32:00 AM
Very creative work, Victor. Did you ever see the movie Splash? I love mermaid romance stories!
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Victor Buhagiar
Date: 9/18/2022 10:02:00 AM
Yes, I saw the film quite a long time ago.
Date: 9/18/2022 7:45:00 AM
Lovely imagination Victor that mermaid was fortunate to have your company with her in the deep blue sea. I enjoy reading your wonderful creative mind you have. Gpood bless you my friend...
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Date: 9/18/2022 7:28:00 AM
Victor, your vivid and detailed description makes the imaginary trip to Evon a magical and lovely experience. I trust you had a wonderful time soaring on the waves of your mind during this seafaring love story.
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Date: 9/18/2022 6:51:00 AM
A romantic story where lovers find passion in the sea, Very nicely penned Victor
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Date: 9/18/2022 5:29:00 AM
Enjoyed the ride on the wings of your imagination, Victor. Lovely details enhance the journey to Evon in flight of fantasy, enchanting as a dream. Excellent depiction my friend.
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Date: 9/18/2022 3:41:00 AM
Great story telling Victor, you have great imagination. Enjoy your Sunday. Tom
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