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As the continuous rain trickles from the roof and the gentle breeze stirs the wind chimes to play tunes, a bird warbles chere, chere, to a lady friend who answers cheer.The rain is cold and uninviting to humans but birds must ignore such a small inconvenience to love affairs and courtship.
in the distance a truck's motor hums rain 'pon the road sings
Their chirps to each other get closer. One has moved into the Holly Bush about ten feet closer to the one bird in the Pear Tree. The gentle breeze blows cold mist from the rain upon the old lady in the rocker outon the porch. She shivers and writes a few more words in her notebook..
gentle breezes touch silent wind chimes metal pipes a love affair starts
The poet retreats into the warm, dry and comfortable home. She thanks God for a few minutes to enjoy the creation and the creator..
aromas of food cooked for lunch lingers in silent rooms

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Date: 3/29/2014 3:04:00 AM
Wonderful, breeze, Sara, your writes come from the best part of poetry... XOX~ Linda
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Date: 3/28/2014 10:30:00 PM
The is a beautiful write my friend! You have written an intriguing poem about a typical Spring day on the porch, with you included! I really enjoyed reading this delightful poem this evening! What a grandiose piece, Great Work!! My internet has been out again this week but now I have faster internet and will try to catch up with everybody! I hope there will not be any more interruptions!
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Date: 3/28/2014 9:13:00 PM
this is very lovely to see, Sara. I think it is nice how you did the second haiku!!
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Date: 3/28/2014 7:34:00 PM
Sarah, you let the prose be subjective & the haiku be objective, the haiku must not repeat what is in the prose but add to it with sensory imagery - do not be afraid to use less syllables in the haiku & use your articles so the speech doesn't feel stumbling? My teacher said they call it [cause I was doing it] talking like Tonto? ex: a light breeze touches/ the ridged metal wind chimes -- her cheek flushes [that's an implied metaphor / comparing the wind's touch to his Light & Love
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Date: 3/28/2014 4:43:00 PM
- Everyone deserves such a "love affair ".... beautiful Sara! - Have a nice weekend. - oxox // Anne-Lise :)
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Date: 3/28/2014 1:58:00 PM
Dear Sara, I am unfamiliar with the haibun form, but your descriptions of the birds warbling through the rain was amazingly beautiful. I also love the second verse about the woman who writes in the cold mist before retreating to the warmth of her home. Awesome writing, dear. Love, Carolyn
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