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Lost In Wonder (Naga-Uta)

Desolate,once more Thinking of what could have been; Where did I go wrong? Was there more I should have done! Three words left unsaid- The arrogance of male pride, Shackle emotions..inside

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Elaine George

Date: 9/6/2008 8:03:00 AM

Those three words that we are sometimes so afraid to say as our ego gets in the way. You have expressed the arrogance of the female pride as well. Sensational writing as always, Brian. lainie

Ernesto P. Santiago

Date: 9/4/2008 3:32:00 PM

great job done here...and i loved the way you ended this lyric...a beautiful couplet! rgds, Ernesto

Maggie Huscroft

Date: 9/2/2008 2:50:00 AM

brilliant closing couplet Brian.... Aw those three words always get you into trouble ...said or unsaid

Heidie Buys

Date: 8/30/2008 4:41:00 PM

You capture the male ego in all of its frailty. Good one. Regards Heidie

Sharon Winter

Date: 8/29/2008 8:33:00 AM

That stubborn male pride at such a cost. A lesson many have to learn. Sad, emotional and so well written. Love, Shar

Michael Degenhardt

Date: 8/29/2008 4:45:00 AM

I agree, such a sad write, presented so clearly. Shouldn't the first line have 5 lines in order to conform to the style? However, still an excellent write. Michael

Kristin Reynolds

Date: 8/29/2008 3:27:00 AM

Oh, how sad. :( Such a small gift to give another, yet wometimes for some, the hardest thing to give is love...sad, but beautiful lyric Brian, love Kristin :)