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Left Behind

In this cluttered attic of my mind, I harbor so many memories of Daddy. The ones that make me smile and those that hurt are inextricable. He was hard on my siblings and me. Oh, he was never physical, but his words often made us wish for the belt instead. How many times did he wither us— and Mom!—with scornful, demeaning words? Why? Mom prepared a meal that was less than perfect. We kids forgot a chore or made below 90 on test, . . . Dad’s need for perfection extended beyond our household. More than once, he lashed out at the local grocery store owner: “There are a few slightly dented cans on your shelves! Do you expect people to buy these?!” I mentioned smiles. The few times he bragged on me—Good job, Son— I felt like a King, and I smiled for days, no matter what else transpired during that time. Memories of Dad were all formed by Christmas Eve when I was thirteen. He left “to get a few last-minute presents, so you kids can’t go.” We haven’t seen him since. We noticed suitcases and his belongings were gone. We’ll never know exactly why he left. At first, we blamed ourselves; we couldn’t measure up. He left behind his family, like dented cans on shelves. I wonder if we ever cross his mind. FICTION February 4, 2021 Contest Title: Break My Heart, Why Don't Cha? Sponsor: Edward Ibeh

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Date: 2/5/2021 9:44:00 AM
Thank goodness this is fiction my dear friend, you kept us in suspense until the last moment - this unfortunately does happen in life, and it is so very sad. Hugs and blessings, Jennifer.
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Janice Canerdy
Date: 2/7/2021 6:34:00 AM
Thanks so much, Jennifer. Janice
Date: 2/4/2021 9:17:00 PM
Hello Janice … thankfully your poem is fiction, but sadly this occurs in fact. No matter what, it’s a heartbreaking situation - thank you Janice - Lindsay
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Janice Canerdy
Date: 2/5/2021 6:58:00 AM
Thanks so much, Lindsay. Janice
Date: 2/4/2021 7:03:00 PM
WoW! Janice, What a heartbreaking write that pulls at the heartstrings. Although your poem is fiction, this is true for many. Your last two lines were a good yet sad conclusion to a well-written write. Best wishes in the contest-Alexis
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Janice Canerdy
Date: 2/5/2021 6:57:00 AM
Thanks so much, Alexis. Janice
Date: 2/4/2021 4:45:00 PM
Happens to some! I knew these two kids whose mom was an alcoholic. She abandoned them to their father. The girl would cry on the teacher’s lap and look out the window. Oh how long did she wait for a mama who would not return. Is she waiting still. Oh still my heart...
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Janice Canerdy
Date: 2/5/2021 6:57:00 AM
Kim, thank you so much! Janice
Date: 2/4/2021 4:33:00 PM
It may be fiction but it certainly stirs the heartstrings. A very compelling poem indeed. Best wishes for the contest.
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Janice Canerdy
Date: 2/5/2021 6:56:00 AM
Thank you so much, W.A. Janice
Date: 2/4/2021 12:29:00 PM
i'm so glad this is fiction, janice! so well-written and i especially love the dented can image used again at the end...
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Janice Canerdy
Date: 2/5/2021 6:56:00 AM
Thanks so much, Ilene. Janice
Date: 2/4/2021 7:26:00 AM
Well written Janice glad to see it was fiction, but you do come across people like that who find fault with everything and everyone, they should look in the mirror occasionally. Good luck in the contest, hope you're well Tom
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Janice Canerdy
Date: 2/4/2021 12:23:00 PM
Thanks so much, Tom! Hope you too are well. Janice

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