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Hanging Out At Santa Monica Pier

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After the party, I woke up on a tropical island Poetry Contest

*from a song "Itsy Bitsy Teeny Weeny Polka Dot Bikini"

Hanging out at Santa Monica Pier, wining in dixie cups, dancing in the sand. Chants of drink…drink…drink. I took no time to think…think…think. I wake up with a cacophonous surf, unlike the gentle roar of a seashell, and my head pounds, my eyes barf in the light bright of dawn’s scarf. Where am I, I wonder…how did I… Asleep around me, are surfboards. The breakers bound an “Aloha.” When did I leave Santa Monica? No suitcase with me. Still in my bikini. Did none come with me? Am I dreaming? I hear those chants of drink…drink…drink. Why’d I take no time to think…think…think I’d have felt bare, but girls galore arrive with itsy bitsy teeny weeny suits.* I have to broach the subject with hot breath. They won’t believe me; my pride’s death. They giggle and say, “We are having the same dream!” Here we party in Waikiki with tropical sips. Chants ring out, drink…drink…drink I take no time to think…think…think I wake up on a beach at Santa Monica Pier. The rounds of dreams, unreal, a bit upset. I’d hoped to tour the Pacific Island of Oahu. Instead I quip, “ What..where..why..when..who? I hear those chants of drink…drink…drink I won’t fall for the same PTSD prank. This time I run into the California waters. Taken by a shark - with no sons or daughters.

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Date: 7/30/2024 6:58:00 PM
"cacophonous surf", "my pride’s death"... A beautiful writing. Congratulations!
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Kim Rodrigues
Date: 7/30/2024 7:44:00 PM
Thank you, Christuraj!
Date: 7/30/2024 11:49:00 AM
Congratulations on your win. I enjoyed reading your very creative island write/story. I will take your drink. Hahaha!!! Have a very fun day writing away...........
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Kim Rodrigues
Date: 7/30/2024 7:44:00 PM
LOL! Thanks!
Date: 5/31/2024 7:34:00 PM
Hi Kim, I think think think I love it! That frosty drink makes it hard to think and never leaves you in the pink. Take three aspirin and call me in the morning. The doctor is in.
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Kim Rodrigues
Date: 5/31/2024 7:48:00 PM
LOL! Thanks, Randy!
Date: 5/29/2024 7:34:00 PM
LOL this is funny, I hope that's okay....I absolutely loved your tone and enjoyed reading
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Kim Rodrigues
Date: 5/30/2024 6:33:00 AM
Yes! Glad you found it funny! Makes my day!
Date: 5/29/2024 8:27:00 AM
Harsh yet sobering. A schoolboy's dream, teeny weeny bikini's, I barely remember that song. Hope you find your way to Oahu the heart of Hawaii. Aloha
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Kim Rodrigues
Date: 5/29/2024 9:08:00 AM
I lived there for three years when I was in the Navy :)

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