Halcyon Moon Glimmer Ignite

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Written: April 13, 2025, for contest Sponsored by: Constance La France Quote: "Let the water settle and you will see the moon and stars mirrored in your being," By Rumi ****************** Oat flakes float over the pale golden sky, A white moon floats easily over land awry, A shining reflection waltzes in your brown eye. Your golden shade suits my dulcet face, Glaucous clouds wrap seagulls as they pace, Roses chilly hands ignite your heated place. Soak it all in while I built a sandcastle—our empire, A soft, wild cry from the coast, where we fire, Seashells, salt and sand spats, our hearts wire. Postcard-worthy memories cram my halcyon mind, I'm catching a glimpse of moon face from behind.

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Paige Hind

Date: 4/21/2025 10:09:00 AM

Enchanting work, truly marvelous

Paula Goldsmith

Date: 4/19/2025 10:38:00 AM

Back with Congratulations on your win. I loved reading your lovely write again. Happy Easter... Have a blessed day with your win................

Valsa George

Date: 4/15/2025 5:16:00 AM

"Oat flakes float over the pale golden sky, A white moon floats easily over land awry,".... I love your usage 'oat flakes'- so apt for the beige colored clouds of the night sky. Some clouds are glaucous... very soothing! The entire scene looks like a post card. I feel like slipping into a dreamscape... ! Very beautiful. All the Best dear friend.

Silent One

Date: 4/13/2025 12:30:00 PM

Hey Sotto.. Your poem is dreamy, tender, and almost nostalgic—a kind of love letter wrapped in soft seaside light... I love how nature and emotion are woven together—sandcastles becoming empires, seashells and hearts intertwined. The whole thing feels very intimate but also universal, like a quiet postcard from a place we’ve all longed for. That final line—"I'm catching a glimpse of moon face from behind."—is especially lovely. It leaves the reader with this gentle mystery, like the feeling of watching something beautiful just out of reach. This was such a peaceful and heartfelt read. You’ve captured something really special here

Paula Goldsmith

Date: 4/13/2025 11:43:00 AM

What a Lovely write and pretty moon picture. I love both. I enjoyed reading this. "Good Luck" We both did this one. Have a wonderful spring day.........