Haiku

Frozen still plateau Nature waits in silent pose Bears in dens snore on seashell island contest

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Poet Destroyer A

Date: 5/5/2013 7:25:00 AM

Good morning, Joyce, Congratulations with your Featured Poem of the week :-) Take care, and enjoy your wonderful day. Always & Forever! **LINDA**

Daver Austin

Date: 4/29/2013 12:37:00 PM

Aint gonna poke my nose in that cave, Joyce. Love Haikus. Love this one. Congrats on the selection. daver

Raul Moreno

Date: 1/7/2009 2:20:00 PM

This is agreat haiku, I love writing them too...Raul

Farah Chamma

Date: 12/18/2008 9:25:00 PM

A wonderful Haiku...Thanks for sharing... Always, Farah

John Heck

Date: 12/9/2008 11:08:00 AM

This clever haiku brought a BIG smile to my face today. Thank you for the well needed chuckle! Wishing you and your family a Happy & Blessed Holiday season. Peace and happiness always, John

Sean Kelly

Date: 11/25/2008 1:49:00 PM

Great " no-name" Haiku , Joyce ....Perhaps Keith is correct , re " waits " ... It's good .....

Keith Bickerstaffe

Date: 11/25/2008 11:45:00 AM

You still have 'plateau/pose.' ...more effective placed at the end of the lines...

Keith Bickerstaffe

Date: 11/25/2008 11:43:00 AM

You give up the alliteration but gain the assonance of 'nature waits.'

Keith Bickerstaffe

Date: 11/25/2008 11:41:00 AM

Super HAIKU Joyce! ...the alliteration of 'plateau/pauses' is neat. (suggestion: 'waits' instead of 'pauses' for the 7-syllable line.) Love, Keith