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Discovering Women

In 1950 the boy's world was mostly populated by women. Men were there as well but they were like forces of nature dark, incomprehensible, moving around making deep sounds. Women had red painted nails, they had permed hair, they had bosoms smelling of babies. They spoke often, mostly pleasantly, their words left a dryish lipstick taste on the boy's lips. When they kicked off their high heels the damp odour of their nylon stockinged feet had a strange allure. There were little girls, small feral things with glittering, gathering eyes and they sometimes bit. The boy wanted one of these but did not know how to acquire her. So he touched her hair and she slapped him away. That night he slept with the sting of her eyes cuddled in his arms.

Copyright © | Year Posted 2008




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Date: 12/2/2008 7:58:00 PM
Hello Denis - yes, that fine line between prose and free verse. I appreciate your insight into this poem and your ability to read it for what it is. Thanks :)
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Date: 12/2/2008 12:20:00 PM
Some might call this prose, but that would be missing the element that makes it poetry: the music of it. The narrative tells us something but it is the use of the language that makes the reading an experience. The imagery is brilliant: ‘Men were there as well-but they were like forces of nature’; ‘their words left a dryish lipstick taste-on the boy's lips.’ and ‘There were little girls,-small feral things’ have adreamy feel. This speaks volumes about the choice of words that build it.
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Date: 12/1/2008 8:10:00 AM
Wow...this poem was amazing, with sensuality, and yet longing of a boy. Your word choices are wonderful, De Waal. Excellent work here! ~ Carrie
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Date: 12/1/2008 5:43:00 AM
Memory brought to life with great words of imagery. Love this write. I guess she couldn't resist your charms after all. Enjoyed. Love, Shar
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Date: 12/1/2008 5:26:00 AM
When they kicked off their high heels the damp odour of their nylon stockinged feet had a strange allure interesting :)
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Date: 12/1/2008 4:57:00 AM
This is beautiful my friend. I love the last stanza..sleeping with the sting...wonderful..you painted a picture that I was able to follow throughout. Great job.
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