Malabika Ray Choudhury Poet Verse

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Dewdrops

soft
dew drops 
quivering 
on lotus leaves
lithe jui flowers sprawled
white orange-hued buds

clouds glide tangerine sky
koels croon symphony 
mehndi bushes
faint fragrant  
birds soar
free


                               Written on August 9, 2021

Note: Experimented with this descriptive verse of two stanzas - starts with one word, one syllable - goes up to six lines with six syllables (increasing syllables). Second stanza vice versa - begins with six, and it ends with one word, one syllable (decreasing).


                                          FIRST PLACE 
        A Brian Strand 1 to 14 lines Poetry contest

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Paris-Maree Boreham September 4, 2021 at 12:05 PM Love Dewdrops <3

Constance La France September 4, 2021 at 8:40 AM Mala, beautiful and a great example for your contest ~ love and serenity _Constance

Eve Roper September 3, 2021 at 11:13 AM Great example, Malabika.

Andrea Dietrich August 16, 2021 at 8:23 PM This is very pretty and reminds me a little of a double etheree that has been modified by being shortened, put into two parts and the bottom part reversed. Congrats on your win. Wonderful. And I love the name for the form Malabika Ray Choudhury August 17, 2021 at 1:48 AM Thanks, Andrea. Good to know about double etheree. I am loving the name too.

Anitha Jayasankar August 15, 2021 at 10:34 PM This is such an inspiring enjoyable form that you experimented with dear Mala... Hearty congrats sweet friend... I will surely try to use this form in your new contest... Hugs... ~ Ani Malabika Ray Choudhury August 16, 2021 at 10:43 AM Thank you, Ani. I am really excited to introduce this form. Really appreciate your support.

Christuraj Alex August 12, 2021 at 9:47 PM Wow. You are teaching me a new form of writing. Thank you very much for the same. Malabika Ray Choudhury August 13, 2021 at 4:47 AM Dear Friend - this was an experiment, but I am glad to announce the arrival of MERSE. Thank you.

Krish Radhakrishna August 12, 2021 at 1:38 PM Mala Congrats on this new creation and your win! I liked the Mehndi bushes- although I have seen the leaves, never the bush! do they have the smell of mehndi? I should find them on my next trip to India!! Malabika Ray Choudhury August 12, 2021 at 3:40 PM Krish, thanks so much. I lived in a house in my childhood where the garden was fenced by Mehndi bushes - my father planned the entire garden, and the fence was his idea.

Jan Allison August 12, 2021 at 12:38 PM what a beautiful poem and I love the form you have created, will see if I can come up with something for you:-) hugs Jan xx Malabika Ray Choudhury August 12, 2021 at 12:55 PM Thanks, Jan. Really appreciate your uplifting words. Looking forward to read amazing poems.

Paula Goldsmith August 12, 2021 at 8:49 AM Congratulations on your win. A creative/beautiful write. I also love the pretty lotus flower picture. Have a blessed day................. Malabika Ray Choudhury August 12, 2021 at 9:04 AM Thank you, Paula. Dewdrops on lotus petals is the most amazing sight - reminds me of fragility of life! Love, My Friend.

Beata Agustin August 12, 2021 at 7:50 AM Thanks for sharing this... exposing your poetic creativity and exemplifying what your contest requires. God bless you. Malabika Ray Choudhury August 12, 2021 at 7:53 AM Thanks, Beata. We are on a poetic journey - I am inspired by your and all the talents here. Love ~ Mala

Rama Balasubramanian August 12, 2021 at 7:36 AM Beautiful poem. Congratulations on your well deserved win. Loved your created form, will surely try for contest. Can I if inspired write more than one stanza. That is two or three merse. Malabika Ray Choudhury August 12, 2021 at 7:38 AM Thanks so much, Rama. The form itself requires two stanzas, Dear Friend, but not three. Love and hugs ~ Mala

Constance La France August 12, 2021 at 7:20 AM Mala, first congratulations on your deserving First Place win in Brian's contest. I love your created form and your new contest using it is inspiring me to write of glory in nature ~ love and serenity _Constance Malabika Ray Choudhury August 12, 2021 at 7:32 AM Constance, My Dear Poet, I am so honoured with your comment. I am amazed and humbled with Brian Strand's contribution to inspiring new poets like me, and all poets. Kudos to him. Love and hugs ~ Mala

Natasha L Scragg August 12, 2021 at 6:11 AM It's a very interesting form of poetry. This is beautiful and its clear why you got first place and well done! Think I might try your challenge. Never written in this form before. This is the exciting part of poetry soup, you never stop learning. Thank you. Natasha. Malabika Ray Choudhury August 12, 2021 at 6:14 AM Dear Natasha, So glad to read your inspiring comment. I tried this form, and thought it worked for a short descriptive verse, You are right - this is the best part of being in this site - you never stop to learn. Love ~ Mala

JC Brul August 10, 2021 at 7:44 AM A great creation dear Mala. I would love to call this form, Malaverse.....KUDOS!! Malabika Ray Choudhury August 10, 2021 at 7:52 AM That’s a great suggestion, JCB. How am I going to thank you enough! It’s a Nature-themed, descriptive, 2- stanza verse with 6 lines in each stanza, increasing syllables in lines. Love the Name! WOW! How creative you are!

Sara Kendrick August 10, 2021 at 3:34 AM I like this descriptive free verse very much. The lotus flower is a beauty. Your visit to my page was uplifting. Sara Sara Kendrick August 10, 2021 at 8:45 AM It is very similar to several other forms like Kyrielle , Lanturne, and Nonette just a little different. These can be used as shape poems if centered and make bells, hours glasses, etc. Enjoyed reading your work. Sara

Joanna Daniel August 10, 2021 at 2:36 AM Awesome imagery, Malabika:) Malabika Ray Choudhury August 10, 2021 at 3:33 AM Thanks, Jo. dewdrops and Lotus flowers are my favourites.

L Milton Hankins August 9, 2021 at 7:44 AM Lovely work, Malabika! Thanks for sharing. Malabika Ray Choudhury August 9, 2021 at 7:52 AM Thanks, Milton.

Vijay Pandit August 9, 2021 at 7:35 AM Awesome poetry, Mala. I enjoyed the read. Malabika Ray Choudhury August 9, 2021 at 7:53 AM Thanks, Vijay! Dawn brings poetry.