break-up Senryus

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Quick break-up Senryus.
Pick one to quickly, cut that old
relationship cord:

I'm sorry, say what?
I can't hear you (confused look)
- we’re breaking up.

You’re the guy that
every girl at our school wants
- it's their lucky day.

It's time that we took
our relationship to the
previous level.

I still cherish the
initial misconceptions
I had about you.
.
.
Songs for this:
Lovefool by The Cardigans
Nothing Can Stop Us by Saint Etienne
Forever by X-Cetra

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Vincine Fallica

Date: 9/6/2025 12:08:00 PM

Argh? . Anais, I didn't count your syllables either. I was writing about mine. Read it again. I added line breaks. . . . Posted these on my Fb page.

Vincine Fallica

Date: 9/6/2025 6:09:00 AM

<3 . Ah yes, these are GREAT / The gateway drug to my enchantment / You've hooked me for years. . . . Okay, technically two syllables too many. Will you allow it, or revoke my poetic license? . . (How's the food?)

Anais Vionet
Date: 9/6/2025 6:50:00 AM

Argh, these senryus are from my vast collection of found papers - I didn't count the syllables - but I fixed them, thanks =p

Anais Vionet
Date: 9/6/2025 6:45:00 AM

Let's see, food.. the McDonald's are called 'McDo' in France, they look different look up: "France, paris, alsatian facade of mcdo" and they have upscale McCafé sections, fancy pastries and espresso (served in ceramic cups). I use my water bottle because take-out coffee isn't usually a thing. The burgers have better cheese and there are weird menu items - like beer after breakfast. =]