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The blade penetrated the flesh like a prong to a pitted plum he had played with war toyed with war yet the gun well the gun didn't have balls Not for him the sterile three shrouds removed expunging of visera with a gun sissy pistols pansy takers Stick um good part the seas of red wake and feed the hounds of war plastic pop-guns shatter beneath the heel of Mars Man UP, raise the staff and shove the pig sticker into mother's child Oh man, war, Old Man War do you visit him each night as you enter what should be the path to love? Have a poke little man just remember, all that was is ... and will be born again. Dedicated to a constant friend and inspiration Chris Aechtner Inspired by his write "kids use toy guns'

Copyright © | Year Posted 2012




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Date: 2/26/2012 3:15:00 PM
Debbie, thank you placing me even in the running, I liked this poem very much and thank you again, without the Lord I'd have nothing but with His aid and the friends here on the soup all is possible, Will be on a radio program in the northeast next month and plan on giving kudo's to the poetrysoup members, so God bless and thanks for allowing my entry in God bless Bob
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Date: 2/22/2012 6:40:00 AM
I really enjoyed this dedication..and by the way..you really choose interesting intriguing titles.. Thanks for sharing-Charma
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Date: 2/22/2012 12:06:00 AM
Hmm.. couldn't agree more Debbie, good to see this piece "out there"
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Date: 2/21/2012 8:34:00 PM
Debbie, this poem.. is a good dedication... war.. what is war really... with out the kid.. anyways.. don't mind me..i'm half awake half asleep... Have yourself a good night, always* PD
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Date: 2/21/2012 7:17:00 PM
wow, this is quite the bloody poem, Debs. Just what war is deserving of, to show it for what it is, not something glorious at all!(jack is saying congrats. what contest did this win in?)
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Date: 2/21/2012 2:30:00 PM
A strong and serious poem you written today Debbie, good work! - oxox love Anne-Lise
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Date: 2/21/2012 2:08:00 PM
Powerful piece indeed, Debs. Many congrats on your wins : )
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Date: 2/21/2012 12:16:00 PM
Wow, I can read this on two levels, Deb. The imagey is fantastic and somehow it reminded me of the last man I dated. LOL Chris is always a great source of inspiration, isn't he? I really don't like to see children playing with guns. We should be promoting love, not war. Great job! Love, Carolyn
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Date: 2/21/2012 2:02:00 PM
Yes Caro I meant all to hear this on 2 levels ;) so nice to hear from you!
Date: 2/21/2012 11:23:00 AM
I abhor violence and yet I feel if one MUST be violent one should be made to FEE the gorific horror of it and not let murder and kiling be sanitized...drop a bomb and fly
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Date: 2/21/2012 8:58:00 AM
i know how many of you poets read this lady's extraordiarily insigtful works and how few read mine....but if you read some of mine you would realize that this weaver of wonder writes a lot about the same subjects, one of them being represented by the subject of how inhumane, senseless and useless war is, especially when most of them are all fought in the name of whose god can beat up the other's god. i'd like nothing more than to write "gmta" (great minds think alike) but if you ask me this lady is in a class of her own.....her emotions make my eyes bleed and my heart ache....girl, you got it BIG TIME! your pIends and fan, ~free cee!~ PHREEPOETREE
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Date: 2/21/2012 8:13:00 AM
Smile ˜ Peek A Boo, I see You - Hahaha - Love, John!:) *
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