Andrea Dietrich Poet Sijo

Beach Spa For My Feet

I push my two feet blissfully, deeply into sand.
Buried toes wiggle in the smoothness of fine grains warmed by sun.
Taking my feet abruptly from their fun, down to the shore I run.

Into a different kind of warmth I wade my feet.
Caressed by briny ocean tide, they splash like happy children till
back on dry land, they’re plunged again into the sun-kissed sand.

(DANG, I just saw it can be only ONE sijo for the contest. Someone 
tell me which is better! Or I'll have to figure out a way to combine 
the two!)

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Kash Poet February 10, 2012 at 6:34 PM No it is not the same one.It is nonnet and that one was Free verse.I borrowed only the 8th line of this poem from that free verse...

Kash Poet February 7, 2012 at 5:54 PM Waiting for your Footles..........I am outta here..

Maureen Lefanue January 31, 2012 at 2:33 AM Thanks, Andrea. Only the new earth will be perfect. Man is sure mucking up this one. How I love that sand. I enjoyed your cute poem. I should take myself to the ocean more often than I do - it's only 15 mins away. Love & hugs, Maureen

Sidney Beck January 29, 2012 at 10:41 AM my advice.......it is obvious that the first is the one to submit.....you would have to rewrite the second to make it independently understandable.....hope this helps you decide

Judy Ball January 28, 2012 at 1:32 PM I think I like this one best. Love the description. Both are really good. God Bless, JB

Jack Horne January 28, 2012 at 1:05 PM I love them both - maybe you could use the two sijos for another contest. A sure winner, my friend

S.Jagathsimhan Nair January 28, 2012 at 4:52 AM Both are excellent, but if it is to be one the second is what i prefer..now this inspires me to try writing a sijo, jag

Robert Pettit January 27, 2012 at 10:25 PM This is double the fun to read. Your contest entry is the best of these two combined.

James Peranteau January 27, 2012 at 4:28 PM This is a great write dear poet ! My suggestion is to enter both ! Have a blessed weekend Andrea....much love, james

Charlotte Puddifoot January 27, 2012 at 3:15 PM andrea, this is such a sunshiny, upbeat entry for the contest, what a nuisance it can only be one sijo! methinks you'll have to figure out a way to combine the two and keep everybody happy haha

Russell Sivey January 27, 2012 at 12:34 PM Wow, Andrea, these are two great Sijo! I rather enjoyed the second one the best, with a little adjustments I think it will be perfect for the contest! "Into a special kind of warmth I wade my feet" could be a start of the Sijo... just an idea, Andrea, I wouldn't say that's the best way to do it! Thanks for all your support! Excellent Work!!

Carol Sunshine Brown January 27, 2012 at 12:05 PM I am stopping by to thank you for your comment on my poem "Touching" Andrea. I hope you have a wonderful weekend. Love, Carol P.S. I love the second one best Andrea. It says so much more.

Rhonda Johnson-Saunders January 27, 2012 at 11:48 AM They're both so good! The line, caressed by briny ocean tide, I have to admit is my favorite. Tough decision! Blessings, Rhonda

Kash Poet January 27, 2012 at 11:30 AM I think second one is Better.I liked both of them.Best wishes for the contest Andrea.

Anne-Lise Andresen January 27, 2012 at 11:21 AM Do it again Andrea,but with MY feet !!!Love it. - oxox love and good luck Anne-Lise